Thinnest String

Thinnest String

A Chapter by Dave Brown



Cigarette smoke crawled the filthy ceiling

A last bit of ash before it fell

One more drag would kill it

A minor refuge from night’s hell


In from heavy rain, he was cold

Almost soaked through to the skin     

Back from black street corner watching

With the whiskey now pouring in   


The third floor corner window

In the cheap skid row hotel

She’d given herself to another

He’d been paid very well to tell


How could he have possibly known

Of the dark deed to follow

The revenge of a shattered husband

His feelings were just a deep hollow


One more tip of the glass

Hid his guilt in a well filled back corner

Lifting the collar on his damp trench coat

It hadn’t been his job to warn her


Back to his office come morning

Waiting for the phone to ring

Waiting for another life

Hanging by the thinnest string



© 2021 Dave Brown

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An old tale of unfaithfulness and the unsavory things it can cause to happen. This has a bit of mystery to it. I love the details of him sitting in the back corner collar up and damp

Posted 1 Month Ago

Dave Brown

1 Month Ago

and made for a lot of great movies
Poetic Beauty

1 Month Ago

That is true. I watched many old black and whites with my grandma, Marlin Brando, James Dean, and so.. read more
Heavy stuff here, Dave, and well done. Sounded like a film noir movie from the 1940's. I could almost see Humphrey Bogart in the next to last verse.

Posted 1 Month Ago

Dave Brown

1 Month Ago

Yes he would likely fit the role, at least his voice would fit
A guilty snitch- great theme. That was awesome Dave! The character development, the wonderful detail.
Very entertaining read.

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Dave Brown

1 Month Ago

Thanks very much
I have tried visiting you a number of times but (to me a least) you have bee.. read more
John Cardwell

1 Month Ago

My wife also said I was a malicious sight on a couple of occasions. :) I'll check into it.
Dave Brown

1 Month Ago

😂 .
One of the most brilliant openings I've seen for a poem like this! WOW! You captured that cig trail & related it to the excruciating moment so well! I get the feeling this guy is a hit-man pimp? It's not entirely clear, but we definitely get the vibe that someone has been slayed for bad behavior! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

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Dave Brown

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