Turn of the Knife

The sun sat up on the mountain top

And started to sink from view,

A shadow, spread on the valley floor

Was creeping over you,

You’d just told me that you’d had enough

In the shade of a chestnut tree,

And then I saw in your shrouded smile

That you meant you were through with me.

I didn’t know what I’d done to you,

I thought it was only love,

But then the shadow had covered you

From the mountain top above,

You pulled your hood up over your hair

And wrapped yourself in your cloak,

Said you were going to leave me there

Go off with some other folk.

Your words were cruel, and pierced my heart

I wasn’t aware I’d erred,

You acted as if we’d strayed apart,

There was someone you preferred,

We’d been together so long I thought

That no-one could take my place,

But since you’ve shown that I’m on my own

I’m afraid of losing face.

And so I lie in the Mulberry bush

And I wait to see him here,

His first embrace with the one I love

Will become his last, I fear,

I took the knife from the kitchen drawer

With a view to bring his end,

But now I see as he ventures near

That the cheating one’s my friend.

How could you take my friend from me

As you take yourself away,

It isn’t enough that I’m losing you

But my friend as well, today,

I’ll not be spilling his blood tonight

As I thought I’d surely do,

But all the anger and hurt I feel

Has turned the knife on you.

David Lewis Paget

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A wild and powerful tale in the poem my friend.
"I’ll not be spilling his blood tonight
As I thought I’d surely do,
But all the anger and hurt I feel
Has turned the knife on you."
I liked the twist at the ending. Thank you David for sharing your outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Valentine]

Well written. Sounds just like many relationships today. The thing is, we cannot force anyone to love us, knife or no knife. Just shows even good friends cannot always be trusted. Great idea for a write Mate. Valentine

[Lucas .A]

Very good writing, I love the rhymes used as well as the language. The end was truly amazing, I loved it.

[Einstein Noodle]

whoa! punctuating turn saved for the ending ... well done once again .. fine rhyme and rhythm and great story .. I don't know if I have ever read or heard this perspective on the cheaters ..
E.

[BL]

Simply brilliant, I love this