Holly Go Round

I had given up on Holly, since the time,

(When rather jolly), she had

Leapt between the covers of

My friend, Rick Barnard's bed.

She had been apologetic, had

Been feeling quite splenetic, could

I 'just ignore, forget it?'

I won't tell you what I said!

 

So she went to live with Harry,

Then I heard she'd married Gary,

But was playing up with Larry,

How the rumours seemed to grow!

I'd begun to favour Mitsy, who

It's true, was often tipsy,

And was too much of a gypsy, so

I had to let her go.

 

Then this Gary came to see me

And he sat there, not too near me

As he'd heard I could be vengeful

Over women, as you know.

And he knew I'd been with Holly

So he said that he was sorry,

But she'd thrown herself upon him

And she wouldn't let him go!

 

So I sat and said, 'What is it?

To what purpose is your visit,

You have won the girl I wanted

And there's nothing I can do!

But his face grew ill, and crumbled,

As his words began to stumble…

'I might have a proposition that

Could just appeal to you!'

 

Then quietly, I listened

To the plot that he had christened,

And I must admit my jaw had dropped

As he began to wail;

'I've made mistakes a-plenty

In my life, well over twenty,

But I have to make it up to you -

So Holly's up for sale!'

 

'I've put her on the market

To the highest bidding target,

And I knew you'd want to bid for her

And she would like it too,

But she knows I'm not a kidder

When I said, 'the highest bidder...

Well, she cried, and said she'd do it,

But she's hoping that it's you!'

 

'Well, I'll need to see the package,

Check the goods for extra baggage,

For remorse, of course, and saggage,'

I began, 'but here's the crunch!

She will have to tend my garden,

Wash my feet, and be most ardent,

Keeping only to my bed, and with

Her mouth shut, for a month!'

 

He knew the game was up, and that

With Holly, he was stuck!

She was playing up with Roly

By the middle of that year,

And the quads were Rick and Harry,

And a little one called Larry,

But with no sign of a Gary,

Little Roly was a girl!

 

David Lewis Paget

Reviews

[Alessander]

I agree with another reviewer; this little piece is jilting. It's an effect of all the rhymes hidden with-in the lines (like so), and one does have to kinda step back and discover where they're all at.

The fact that you used so much rhyme WHILE keeping a somewhat iambic/trochaic meter WHILE telling a story really shows technical mastery. The only real place that seemed a bit awkward to me was the line "for a month!"

But the title and content go hand and hand, and almost reads like a dark fable. Good stuff, as always.

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Bet this was just fun for you. Love the way you wrote it...artistic indeed!

[*** Hey Jude***]

I adore your writing. Every time you hit the mark. I think the portrayal of these characters where woven with exquisite skill. Together, separate, but in the "end" all together now! LOL, you bring laughter, and moments of wondering as your write gently takes me too a very satisfying end.
"Then I laugh again.
In this case
Then quietly, I listened
To the plot that he had christened,".

What a gift you share! ~ :-)

[Marie]

Very good. A little confusing, but fun.

[roarke]

I'm dizzy already. I've known a Holly, and Polly, and Roly..... or two.... The rhymes here are excellent and add to the frolic and fun of the piece. You have to smile when love's delusion puts you on that merry-go-round.