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A Poem by Deandra Dawn

The fear in her eyes
said a thousand words
meaning lost upon disillusion
a hallucination
founded upon obscene logic

© 2012 Deandra Dawn


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Deandra Dawn
This is just the first stanza...

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While reading, i felt the female spin of this http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TxwuB6xPcvs

Posted 8 Years Ago


"obscene logic" would be a good title. I like this poem direct and honest thoughts. Obscene logic can lead us to dangerous places. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


What a witty write.....I enjoyed......Whisk

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Each word is so perfectly placed, creating vibrant colors and feelings on the canvas of the mind and heart... Truly look forward to seeing more as you share your colors with us.

Posted 8 Years Ago


This may be just the first stanza, but in my opinion, it stands on its own. You have said much in few words. Sometimes, less is more...

Posted 8 Years Ago


Wow, you invoked so much imagery in such a few lines...some times, we lose faith, it happens, yet the strength of a person, is to keep moving forward in a positive notion, even when, logic doesn't make sense. Excellent write, Deandra.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ThaT DESCRIBES HALF THE WOMEN I HAVE EVER KNOWN I had a girl friend once who was ruled by emotion and no amount of logic would sway her

Posted 8 Years Ago


Well, it makes me want to read more for sure!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Well, if this is the first - where are the rest? I want more. Keep it coming.....

Posted 8 Years Ago


I know it is only the first stanza, but the 'untitled short' is so perfect in its own little way. You don't give away anything but you tell everything needed to know. Maybe keep this as a poem on its own? And update the rest as a different poem all together. Brilliant.

Posted 8 Years Ago



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Deandra Dawn
Deandra Dawn

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My name is Deandra Dawn and I have been writing for as long as I can remember. I also go by the name, Ravishing Raven, and I am currently reworking my website. What else is there to know when there .. more..

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