Steps

Steps

The ghosts of your past indiscretions
retracing the desirous lines of virtue
reeling back from a desirable sanctuary
undercurrents of emotion
flowing through a destitute
land of untraceable morality
leaning upon an escape
from the steps traced onto
the sand
falling through the cracks
of time
losing recrudescence
and rectifying an action
submerged in
restless restraint

Reviews

[D. L. Vaccaro]

Restless Restraint. Wow. I love that phrase... I also love the juxtaposition of lines 2 and 6... virtue and morality... line 3... I know what that is like... it leaves me wondering though... what is the action you feel so much regret over? But I guess that's why you are retracing your steps. Good poem... more personal than most of yours though... but I like it, perhaps moreso because of that.

[Alex Vidmar]

Well done. Love this.

[Allan Eddings]

Damn morality! And virtue is just vices cloaked and made acceptable! But my outburst over, I shall continue as I should have begun, this piece is superb.

It is amorphous and ephemeral, never entirely within the grasp of the reader but always present - an undercurrent if you will. The use of language is impressive and while I am sure some may be put off by such command, I find myself entranced and lauding such things! There are some brilliant lines in this piece, so many that I cannot choose my favourite.

In admiration and expectation of more brilliant works,
A.E.

[Blindfolded]

If only the past could stay in the past. I love the 6th line..says it all for me.

[Johnny Joe]

I love that 1st line!! "The ghosts of your past indiscretions" so damn true

[Pax]

wonderful and mysterious.

[icaros13]

I feel a familiar inner struggle in this piece. My emotions often flow through the "land of untraceable morality". You've said much with a few well chosen intelligent words. Excellent write.

[Cameron]

Past faults hang like a noose around your neck while each day you walk just waiting to walk over the edge. I love your word choice, keeps things fresh. All in all good job Miss Deandra.

[MoriartyMesa]

Images for a strange reason or another felt Roman to me, maybe Greek, but there is that Latin tone. One of those sort of sonnets that flows with a buccina and aulos. Now the best i can do for a music, mirror, well thank hbo (LOL) http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ND_FmSdO8B4

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

We shouldn't have to pay the rest of our lives for indiscretions, but unfortunately some do. Penned brilliantly Deandra.