Dear Studded Sky, Don't Shine Unless You Can Keep Your Promise This Time!

Dear Studded Sky, Don't Shine Unless You Can Keep Your Promise This Time!

A Poem by DearSweetAgony

Oh, cynical Star
You wink my at my stated desires;
But have yet to make me successful, when it comes to my endeavors.
Dear hysterical Little light,
Is my humiliation a show for you?
Am I just a waggish, silly, wishing fool
Hopelessly wishing my wishes on you, 
for none of my wishes to ever come true?
And if this is so, then
why do you mock me with you presence?
 Is your light of guaranteed hope, just a costume of unyielding brilliance?
I am not your doll, Star!
There is no cotton lined in my flesh; behold a beating heart!
And my soul will no longer be a chew toy-- to be so easily torn apart. 
Goodbye, little fire ball you have no hope to give
to a pondering soul that can't be held down by your rhetoric; 
for she has a life to live.
 Since me and the stars don't get along too swell
perhaps, I could try my wishes with fishes-- at the wishing well! 

© 2011 DearSweetAgony


Author's Note

DearSweetAgony
I was reading some Dorothy Parker...and this is what I came up with.

Just be honest...so, what do you think?

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Nice vocab. I like this poem and the meaning behind it. No point wishing on stars. Better to make your wished come true by living your life. That's what I got out of it, anyway. The last line was cute. Almost comical. Did you intend it to be a little funny?

Posted 7 Years Ago


I honestly don't know who Dorthy Parker is, but your writing is amazing, I enjoy seeing your progress as you become more intense and build up a larger vocabulary bank, yes. Vocabulary Bank.

Posted 9 Years Ago


This is nothing like I have ever read... Its a new topic for me, and it has a huge impact on the reader... Good choice of words... Since I don't know a thing about Dorothy Parker, I can't critique more than this...

Posted 9 Years Ago


and you choice of words...GREAT!!!!!


Posted 9 Years Ago


cool...things like a wish to a star never do come true...this is a great poem...


Posted 9 Years Ago


Not familiar with Dorothy Parker but I liked the style and expression in this write!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Good write!
I loved your expressions and phrases.
The words were also fantastically chosen.
Nice Job!

Posted 9 Years Ago


smooth use of metaphors and simile could be more..liked it

Posted 9 Years Ago


i liked it...i can tell you like to write and i like the use of metaphors

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Roe
very good

Posted 9 Years Ago



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