Ocean's Roar.

Ocean's Roar.

A Poem by Deathless_Sorrow

Lights along the coast can see what most can only boast.
That which legends can only dream and seas can only scream.
Dark shadows fly by but are only reflected in the sky.
Waters moan at such a sight, men groan at such a blight. 
The Ocean's Roar.
The Ocean's Roar.

© 2011 Deathless_Sorrow


Author's Note

Deathless_Sorrow
I'd like to do more with this but I've ran out of ideas for it.

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I really like where this is going but I would suggest continuing it. Perhaps, speak of sailors lost at sea, how inky black night water consumes men's rationality when surrounding by nothing by it. Speak of the creatures in the sea, consumed yet fluid with the oceans wild, uncontrollable movements. This has tons of options, but I understand sometimes you need another set of eyes.

"That which legends can only dream and seas can only scream." -- That is a powerful line. The atmosphere it creates is one you should run with

Posted 12 Years Ago


oh wow i adore this, amazing write.
I think this is fine the way it is.
I wouldn't add anymore.

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Added on May 30, 2011
Last Updated on September 22, 2011
Tags: Deathless, Sorrow, Maith, Matt, Poetry, Keenum

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Deathless_Sorrow
Deathless_Sorrow

Greenup, KY



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My name is Matt. I've come to a bit of a block recently and I'm not sure if I'll ever be able to drag myself out of it, so don't expect frequent posts. Thanks for reading. more..

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