Depression

Depression

Depressions creeping in like a fog looming over the Atlantic

Dense grey matter choking so thick there is no air

It’s in the distance but the fog horn blows, a warning

Rolling in like a freight train with no way of stopping it

There will be no way to see through it only to wave

Your hands frantically in front of you for some direction

Depression's creeping in like a fog over the Atlantic

It’s a like a car crash waiting to happen, all you can do

Is wait, buckle up hold on and deal with the aftermath.

 

Deborah Kelly (Debbie Philly) 7/14/14

Reviews

[Inject Positivity]

I would say this was totally an amazing observation on the characteristics of depression, I have been there and I know how it feels... Your choice of words, expressions and presentation all are perfect to create this excellent this excellent work... The ending part has been the standing part of this poem... You have metaphorically conveyed the true pain of a depressed heart... Well done frnd...

Sincerely
Dhiman

[Debbie_Philly]

WOW thank you so much Dhiman... your words mean allot... :) and yes its crippling sometimes... and you have toj ust at least write it out ... thanks again.

[Debbie_Philly]

oops typos sorry

[m.s.early]

The black. The hole. The infinite gravity. I just want to pull the shades, kill the lights, crawl into a ball and grieve without hope on my bed.

[Debbie_Philly]

:( Im sorry.... yes its like that and it sucks.... I hope your hanging in there and thank you for reading !!!!

[Levi Levin]

It's something that is definitely real but it can be defeated also. I have fought it many times. When I think of how blessed I am and spend time in prayer it has the among the best results. Keep fighting the good fight--Levi

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you... and Im sorry it took so long to reply... I have been out of commission. Yes you are so right... it can be defeated... My daughter has it too and shes is really thriving !!! :) Thank you again

[Levi Levin]

Your welcome!

[closed]

great personification

it seems to paint depression a face

however grim


good write

-Dream

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you.so so much.. and Im sorry it took so long to reply... I have been out of commission

[Tricia O'Brien]

Amazing, absolutely amazing
I not only relate but appreciate the intensity behind every word

Trish-

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you... and Im sorry it took so long to reply... I have been out of commission.

[poetic soul]

so very true.. can relate to the feeling so deeply... there is actually nothing you can do ... just wait and buckle up.
very well written :)

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so much Poetic Soul..... yes its hard but thats the only thing to do .... thanks for reading . I will be over to you soon... Just got my computer back :)

[Inder24]

Really loved the way you captured the imagination in this poem especially the last two line . great job :D

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so much Inder24... that means allot :)

[Shaquana Adams]

You captured this really well. I like your writing style :)
-QuanaWana

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so much Shaquana..... very nice to meet you !!! :)

[TL Boehm]

that list line especially is all too truthful. Well penned.

[Debbie_Philly]

:) Thank you TL.... I do feel like that sometimes... I guess thats where I pulled it from :) Thanks for reading !!!

[Michael G. Smith]

Last two lines SO TRUE! I never suffered any depression until a few years ago. Up until that time I thought "Oh, These people need to get over themselves". Once I experienced the loss of control over emotion(no matter what you try short of medication you can't dispel the madness of it) I understood. It scared me so much I was on my knees begging my heavenly father to release me from its grip. Thankfully several weeks later he did and now I watch like your poem says for the warnings. Since then I see the signs and surf the waves much better knowing I'm on the edge and it will pass as it does.

[Debbie_Philly]

WOW Michael.... so sorry you have to go through it as well... your so right... its such a feeling of being out of control... very scary... but yes look for the signs and try and stay on top of it is all we can do. If you need to talk my email is irishdeb64@gmail.... Im not always on but I will answer.... and thank you so much for reading !!! :)