VISIONS

This is a poem I wrote when I was dreaming allot about my life.

 

VISIONS

          

Daydreams and night scenes

are in my mind like an ever

present consciousness.

Awakening me to see my life

as it should be.

I float on illusions shaped to

fit me.

Yet they disburse like clouds

of reality bringing me back

down.

I cling to that bubble I was

floating in not wanting it

to burst.

Visions come to me at night

They tell a story, my life as

it should be.

Truth is revealed to me in signs

encrypted with coding only I

can understand.

I only need to look , listen, except

what it is I see.

Then , only then will my path be

unveiled to my awakening in self

awareness.

My dreams unlock my mind, they

free my soul unto my happiness.

Whispering in my ear…shhh

I need to listen.

 

 

By Debbie Kelly

VISIONS

          

Daydreams and night scenes

are in my mind like an ever

present consciousness.

Awakening me to see my life

as it should be.

I float on illusions shaped to

fit me.

Yet they disburse like clouds

of reality bringing me back

down.

I cling to that bubble I was

floating in not wanting it

to burst.

Visions come to me at night

They tell a story, my life as

it should be.

Truth is revealed to me in signs

encrypted with coding only I

can understand.

I only need to look , listen, except

what it is I see.

Then , only then will my path be

unveiled to my awakening in self

awareness.

My dreams unlock my mind, they

free my soul unto my happiness.

Whispering in my ear…shhh

I need to listen.

 

 

By Debbie Kelly

VISIONS

          

Daydreams and night scenes

are in my mind like an ever

present consciousness.

Awakening me to see my life

as it should be.

I float on illusions shaped to

fit me.

Yet they disburse like clouds

of reality bringing me back

down.

I cling to that bubble I was

floating in not wanting it

to burst.

Visions come to me at night

They tell a story, my life as

it should be.

Truth is revealed to me in signs

encrypted with coding only I

can understand.

I only need to look , listen, except

what it is I see.

Then , only then will my path be

unveiled to my awakening in self

awareness.

My dreams unlock my mind, they

free my soul unto my happiness.

Whispering in my ear…shhh

I need to listen.

 

 

By Debbie Kelly

VISIONS

          

Daydreams and night scenes

are in my mind like an ever

present consciousness.

Awakening me to see my life

as it should be.

I float on illusions shaped to

fit me.

Yet they disburse like clouds

of reality bringing me back

down.

I cling to that bubble I was

floating in not wanting it

to burst.

Visions come to me at night

They tell a story, my life as

it should be.

Truth is revealed to me in signs

encrypted with coding only I

can understand.

I only need to look , listen, except

what it is I see.

Then , only then will my path be

unveiled to my awakening in self

awareness.

My dreams unlock my mind, they

free my soul unto my happiness.

Whispering in my ear…shhh

I need to listen.

 

 

By Debbie Kelly

VISIONS

          

Daydreams and night scenes

are in my mind like an ever

present consciousness.

Awakening me to see my life

as it should be.

I float on illusions shaped to

fit me.

Yet they disburse like clouds

of reality bringing me back

down.

I cling to that bubble I was

floating in not wanting it

to burst.

Visions come to me at night

They tell a story, my life as

it should be.

Truth is revealed to me in signs

encrypted with coding only I

can understand.

I only need to look , listen, except

what it is I see.

Then , only then will my path be

unveiled to my awakening in self

awareness.

My dreams unlock my mind, they

free my soul unto my happiness.

Whispering in my ear…shhh

I need to listen.

 

 

By Debbie Kelly

 

 

Reviews

[Dusky]

I like the imagery you've used here, like that of the encoding and the clouds. The sentences broken up over a few lines was a good effort but somehow it through the rhythm off a bit. When writing imagine it being read out loud and think about how line breaks turn into pauses, and if those pauses should really be in that place.

[Debbie_Philly]

OMG how did I miss this comment... thank you so so much !!!

[B. Boileau]

Vivid images describe the discovery of inner peace. I really like this one. By the way are these reoccurring visions? (Sorry I couldn't help myself )
bill

[Nazarea]

good..i'm not good at poetry though, so other than that, can't say much. I like it, though!
Nazarea~

[Sharon Miller Bolander]

Where would we be without our dreams? Those of us who enjoy writing poems benefit tremendously from the creative side of our minds. I have a feeling this is a poem to which you will return at some future date and rework many of the lines without losing your original thoughts. On a personal note, my earlier pieces got lots of revision after a couple years. Do keep writing and writing! Practice helps you evolve into the poet you really are. :-) Sharon

[WordMaster]

The story line is very well thought out

For me, the rhythm of the poem is somewhat off

Good sense of feeling and emotion in this as well

[Debbie_Philly]

I dont know why it posted 3 copies...lol... sorry about that.