Teenage Rebellion

 

Teenage Rebellion

 

Raw emotions

 Hateful eyes

 

Teenage rebellion

Drama and lies

 

You and I both

Doing our Part

 

Hurt runs deep

Wounded heart

 

Burning bridges

On rivers of pain

 

Tears like fire

Shed in vain

 

It's not love

Or ties we lack

 

Minds searching for

Any way back

 

Some way off this

Destructive path

 

Do I have the strength?

For rebellions aftermath...

 

June 25^th, 2008

By Debra Edwards

 

Reviews

[Valentine]

Debby, since you read this to me long disatance over the phone..hearing you read it and then reading it myself..I wish everyone could have heard the depth of emotion in your voice when you read it to my..All of the feeling you were trying to put into this piece was there in your voice..Nice write kiddo..love and God bless..Valentine

[Daniel]

Great piece!

Being a teenager, the title of this caught my eye immediately. And you really hit the nail on the head. Awesome!

:)

[Carole]

BTW Debby, I loved the short stanzas! Very effective in my opinion. Concise-to the point and hammered it on home!!

[Carole]

Awe, this was great and having experienced it three times over, I do so relate! Can somebody say REBELLION?!
'I know it ALL. You don't understand. You're TOO old. You don't remember what it was like to be a teenager!"
Reality discipline is great. My youngest has 16 hours of community service and 8 hours of traffic school that HE has to pay for. The Job came "JUST IN TIME!" Thanks for the memories! (Though technically we are still making one here and there. Our youngest turns 18 next month. hugs, carole

[emz]

This is good, a bit short, i would of liked a few more lines... teenage rebellion is a thing i know lots about haha... Still very good i liked the style of it.


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[Larissa G.]

I liked it...but it still felt too brief. I feel like it needs to be expanded, elongated.
I hope I don't rain on your parade. I again, I like it, it sums some things up...but it leaves too many things open for me to classify it as finished.