A Victim of My Mind

A Victim of My Mind

A Poem by DeliriousCerises
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Mental abnormalities (mentally ill)

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My serotonin is on the fritz
so I can't seem to feel happiness
My dopamine has lost control
And not all voices are real

Three different minds thinking at once
A mental roller coaster of lows and highs
For a moment I'm running -- flying!
And now snap judgement, I wanna die

GABA retired to the back of my mind
Leaving Adrenaline to deceive me,
Assured the sky will fall, Don't forget
Everything must be perfect
Until Serotonin makes a recovery

The sane road to insanity
This battle inside of me
Always walking a fine line
Between my mind and "reality"

© 2012 DeliriousCerises


Author's Note

DeliriousCerises
I feel this quote fits in nicely. "To conquer oneself is a greater task than conquering others." ~Buddha. Please review honestly. Also I'm referring to several mental disorders, not just one.

Photo Credit: Edge of Sanity by Elvenspot on DeviantArt

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I like this poem because I can relate to it somewhat. I have a mood disorder, so I know what it's like to be fighting with one's emotions all the time, trying to keep control over everything. I enjoyed it very much, and I thought it was a pretty good write :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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What a journey, i feel like i went on a emotional rollercoaster within this piece. Brilliant worded a subject nothing often explored that you have done well. Thank you for another lovely piece

Posted 8 Years Ago


I like this poem because I can relate to it somewhat. I have a mood disorder, so I know what it's like to be fighting with one's emotions all the time, trying to keep control over everything. I enjoyed it very much, and I thought it was a pretty good write :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Really nice piece I just don't agree with the last bit being included. Why did you need that voice to directly address the reader? It was so good up until when it reads "Can't you see?"

Really nice theme and a cool concept, just think it should have been kept within the voice describing indirectly to the reader.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You're right, or Buddha is, that to have control over your mind is probably one of the most difficult things to achieve. The wordplay with the neurotransmitters is quite fun, and the confusion between what's real and what's an illusion created by our mind is depicted brilliantly in the poem.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You are funny! ~ Bidayah ~

Ignore the kid. Food and diet is a very important part of what we are. Its the work of the organic fluids, a miracle in themselves, yet so easily influenced by our conditions and things in the environment we sometimes refer to ' artificial stimulation.' Its a great place to start to know about our body. ~ Shin ~

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Tags: insane, insanity, mental illness, crazy, neurotransmitters

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You can call me Cherry. I love all forms of art, they are like therapy for the soul. I used to write, stories and poem and such, but then I stopped for a long time. All I did was journal, but recently.. more..

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