Burn Me a Diamond

Burn Me a Diamond

A Poem by DeliriousCerises
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I guess this could be about a lot of things

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Fight fire with fire
When nothing else works,
Burn your pretty planet to dust

Then everything's alight
Scorned by blood and bile.

The pressures of your world
Crumbling to ashes and coal,
A diamond may emerge

And cubic zirconian love
Can melt and fade away
In a bitter caustic blaze
Leaving a tragic memory.

© 2012 DeliriousCerises


Author's Note

DeliriousCerises
So this just kind of crept up on me while writing something else and demanded to be written. Let me know what you think, positive or negative.

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Intrinsic.

The line 'burned by blood and fire' seems a little redundant. If the line 'then everything burns' was incorporated with the first stanza, would have been better.
The diamond and cubic zirconian part is terrific, though the flow would have been better if there was no 'and' in the zirconian line.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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The first line reminds me of a Metallica song with the same title. It has an apocalyptic feel to it and I think this poem does to. With that said, I think it really fits the mood of 2012. Amongst this poem which describes our final destruction there is some hope for Renaissance. I see that in your third stanza. I think that really is the peak of this poem and carriers a lot of closure for the situation you have written about.

Given that aspect of the poem, I think that you should put that very strong third stanza last in the poem. That way you would have the contrast of destruction and the fake diamond love with what is created after the destruction is complete.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Intrinsic.

The line 'burned by blood and fire' seems a little redundant. If the line 'then everything burns' was incorporated with the first stanza, would have been better.
The diamond and cubic zirconian part is terrific, though the flow would have been better if there was no 'and' in the zirconian line.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I'm not really sure what the poem entails... but I really do love the words that you use.
Very short, very sweet and extremely sensitive to the word "love" I see.
"Cubic zirconium love" I see how that matches into the title of the poem.
But as for the rest of it... well you already know
I honestly do love the flow and lyrical stanzas.
Bravo.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Short and sweet!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Wow! Great poem! I love the third stanza. This is very well written and I love your use of descriptive adjectives and verbs. You may want to play around a little with formatting and punctuation, but the flow is already pretty great as is. Excellent writing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"When nothing else works
Burn your pretty planet to dust"

This line really caught my attention as the highlight of the poem. I must admit i can be dense when it comes to poetry so the overall meaning of the poem was lost on me.... but there were lines in there that were so elegant that I enjoyed reading it regardless.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on June 11, 2012
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Tags: Burn, Fire, Blaze, Diamond, Love, War, Hate

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DeliriousCerises
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You can call me Cherry. I love all forms of art, they are like therapy for the soul. I used to write, stories and poem and such, but then I stopped for a long time. All I did was journal, but recently.. more..

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