A Look Inside the Crayon Box

A Look Inside the Crayon Box

A Poem by DeliriousCerises
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Where is the line between right and wrong, really.

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There's some for you,
And some for me
And paper to share, for us.

We'll draw curvy lines
We must not cross,
With rules we write in the dust.

The world is not
So black and white,
As once you might think.

Innocence is lost
In bright hues of blue
And erotic shades of pink.

There are crimson crimes
Breaking burgundy ties,
All over pales shades of green.

There's Rainbow Pride
While some mothers cry,
And colorblind hearts turn mean.

Ivory and Obsidian
Charcoal and Chalk
Somber Pitch in the Snow,

Don't get me wrong
There is white and black
And plenty of grey unknown.

There are heavy hearts of gold,
And dirty silver souls.
And yellow brick roads to Hell.

There's lonely orange lives
And warm champagne highs.
And of course, The color purple.

Fiery eyes and jaded brown lies,
There's calico tales of lives gone by
And a tinge for every creed.

There's some for you,
And some for me
And paper for us to share

We'll color caricatures
Of who we wish to be
And the colors will bleed as we stare.

© 2012 DeliriousCerises


Author's Note

DeliriousCerises
I felt like the color distracted from the actual content of the poem. Thank you everyone, for all your feedback though.

Reviews are appreciated, freely share your thoughts ^^

Photo Credit: "I feel about seven" by Macaroni-Waffles

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I love this piece

Posted 7 Years Ago


I would have to agree that the black stanza at the end of the poem does mean it loses some of it's power - although I do understand what you were trying to do with it..... I am, however, impressed with the idea that you came up with in creating this piece. I really like how you attached a definition to each of the colors - and did it in such a well written manner. I enjoyed this read, so thank you for sharing :)

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Posted 8 Years Ago


I think that it is a great idea that you took on how things are classified. You are right, things are not just black and white. I liked how you made the text different colors although I think that the colors for some of those stanzas could be better matched. I think that it was a nice touch to use a different voice in the begging of the poem and color code it in black. However, I think that using those black stanzas again in the end of the poem does not maintain the power that you built in the rest of the poem. I think it would be good to write new lines to close out the poem.

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Posted 8 Years Ago


DeliriousCerises

8 Years Ago

Thank you, it's funny that you mention those being better in the beginning than in the end. I origin.. read more
Clockwork

8 Years Ago

I think that you can have visual elements that make a statement. I think that stanza breaks and spel.. read more
Lina Grey

8 Years Ago

Sorry if I'm intruding on your conversation here, but I would like to agree with Clockwork about the.. read more
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Wow! There is really no other exclamation I can come up with for how well this poem is put together. It's gorgeous. I love the imagery and how evenly it flows. Lovely use of colors to prove the point. I loved it. 100/100!

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Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DeliriousCerises

8 Years Ago

Thank you very much, I glad you truly enjoyed it.
Nice use of color!! Love it!!! Nicely worded!

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Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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DeliriousCerises

8 Years Ago

Actually, you know what, you're right, kind of. I did hesitate about saying "Thanks" for this review.. read more

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You can call me Cherry. I love all forms of art, they are like therapy for the soul. I used to write, stories and poem and such, but then I stopped for a long time. All I did was journal, but recently.. more..

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