*TITLE PENDING*

I was just thinking...

Somethings need to be escaped,

yet i continously find myself

speaking to you

*like light matches and throwing them

on a pile of papers*
I know you well enough

to understand with me,

you hold no good intentions.

*Yet i light candles, and leave them in open spaces,

waiting for them to be knocked over*

I know your game,

similar to how the moon knows the oceans tides

and as temperatures rise....

*I wonder,

how long to we have to play with fire....

before we get burned?*

Reviews

[Michael X]

This is nice Danni, visual and passionately projected with vivd emotional imagery
beautiful first draft, minus the few grammer and spelling errors,
I think the details came through, conceptual in design, the last stanza
would have remained perfect in pattern consistancy if it were two lines.
metaphorically well thought out, keep up the nice work.

[Starr]

Good write right here and very befitting title. Great metaphor usage for the situation. Playing with fire...I like the symbolism of that. Nice.

[Karen Ingram]

Ohhh, I like this. First of all, great metaphor. Love is really like playing with fire, sometimes, and it burns just as badly. Secondly, I like your use of alternating lines with red and black. The poem reads almost as well without the red lines as it does with them. To me, the black lines read like a speech someone is saying to me, while the red lines are like the inner thoughts the person is thinking while speaking to me, but doesn't want me to hear. Everyone has dark thoughts like that, and I think you played this very well. Congrats!

[Angel's Lady]

I had to come in here and read this again! Oh snap! It's still H O T! Great job, Danni...

[Arthur Crow]

This is both cleverly written and exquisite in expression... I love the way presented this poem. So much depth of emotion, your talent is shines bright. A pleasure to read.

[Bluet_Belle]

I like this.

I think we have all been in some situation where our inner moth surfaces and we cant keep out of the fire.

I like the way this is set up, as well as the message, its like, speaking and then afterthought, like, when you pause at the end of one sentence and punctuate it with a thought or a metaphor.

Wonderful write:P

[kollaboratyve]

This is a very well writen poem. A lot of imagery and symbolism and tone. Good write!!!!! You have a great style of conversating in your work,very inviting

[Ivory]

Im really feelin' this piece, loved the ending, powerful.. ; )

[Caramel Gold]

Damn girl that was fire... no pun intended LoL
I really like it, and the title fits perfectly!

[J.Black]

Oh what an excellent write!

*I wonder,
how long do we have to play with fire....
before we get burned?*

I love that line because it's so true! My mother use to tell me that.
If I play with fire, Im going to get burned.

Perhaps with a few adjustments though, this could be ever better!