Digital Reach

Digital Reach

A Poem by Desert Dreamer
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Inspired by PoppySilver's seven words...

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The moon dances to digital pleasures
Savour the knowledge gained in ascent
Reach for the darkness in the sky
The distant peak emanates dark laughter

Altogether, endless agony
Who will calm the voices of the night?

© 2011 Desert Dreamer


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As Awareness ascends, the things masquerading as significant, are exposed, and put to the fire.
Along with the whole organism, or species, if you prefer.
In knowing this, one can be Passerby, because it doesn't really matter.

When we are gone, we will have been the missing link that nobody will miss at all.

So, there is no need to calm the voices of the night.
And the distant peak laughs because it can, knowing something of 10,000 years.
I hope I am getting this right, if not, alert me if you will.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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This is quite claustrophobic, in a good way lol
You literally infuse the universe in all of your work!
Beautiful!
I am so blessed to read your work and know you DD :)
xx

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I loved the use of personification in here. as well as the last line. This piece is short, beautiful, and full of meaning. It leaves the reader with such a wonderful picture of the night sky. Nicely done! :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This covers a lot of territory in six lines. From self to the heavens, and back to we small beings with a timeless question. The first line is a stunning image. Really enjoyed this.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

That first line is captivating and very cool. A splendid use of the words and an inspired write. Questions that are never really answered but get us thinking and very worthwhile to ask....I liked this.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Good question. This is ominous but yet, it is true.
Love the image 'moon dances to digital pleasures'...
Much said in six short lines.
Superb writing as always.

Chloe

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

As Awareness ascends, the things masquerading as significant, are exposed, and put to the fire.
Along with the whole organism, or species, if you prefer.
In knowing this, one can be Passerby, because it doesn't really matter.

When we are gone, we will have been the missing link that nobody will miss at all.

So, there is no need to calm the voices of the night.
And the distant peak laughs because it can, knowing something of 10,000 years.
I hope I am getting this right, if not, alert me if you will.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Why does the man in the moon smile? Is he mocking the lonely?
Your thinking here is very intriguing... you nailed that challenge without breaking a sweat.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very interesting and thought provoking poem. Nice even meter and rhythm. It has a slightly wild feel. I really like the opening. I feel the closing line is somewhat superfluous though. You could probably lose it without hurting the poem. I like "the distant peak emanates dark laughter", it makes me think of how our distant goals, which seem so unattainable, may seem to be mocking us, but also on a darker level, how those goals may in themselves be either actually unattainable, or not actually desirable. A good representation of life, I think. Overall, I read this poem as an observation on our rise as a species to our current point, and also a consideration of the possible "summit" of that developmental curve, and whether it is really something which we wish to attain or not. "Who will calm the voices of the night?", to me, is asking the reader, how would we ignore those unsettling voices, the voices of our deep instincts, which we ignore in order to live in, and progress within, our sterile and technological world. This is a short poem which covers a lot of philosophical meat in a few lines, very well done!

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Oh this is dark and different....I love 'Who will calm the voices of the night?' Great line...and a very well written piece...nicely done...


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Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You breathe out such a dark beauty here... How I love to stare at the moon and wonder of eyes glancing up a thousand years ago... wondering... reaching... Those voices.. how they echo still like ghosts.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Sonoran Desert, AZ



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