Wrong Awakening

inspired by art

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Tower reflects human spirits
as objects
trees crowded out
by buildings
human minds connected
to machines

 

Metamorphosis of meaning
dissolution of spirit
death
disintegration
metropolis of decay

 

Trapped within their own creations
even in sleep she cries out for release

 

Bright clouds bring hope for your escape
concrete cracked by unseen armies
roots of trees patiently strangle
machines that were wrongly awakened
freedom arrives slowly

 

Author's Note

Inspired by the artwork shown titled "Wrong Awakening" by Peter Gric.

Reviews

[R J Askew]

Ach, you capture my daily reality here. I work in London's Canary Wharf, which is a collcetion of towers. I think of them as egos. They are all straight lines of glass and steel and power. My place in all this is in the middle of a room some distance from a window, which never opens, can't open. All I can see from it when I look that way are other buildings. I can see nothing natural an I can't see the sky. This is no way to be. And my mind is linked to the machine in front of me. And I sometimes wake at night thinking about it. Ach, you capture my daily reality in my less than lovely tower, no ivory in sight.

[Doug Ordunio]

Seems rather appropriate for this time, and it fits rather well with the artwork too. My only tiny problem is that the verb you use in the first line is for a plural subject, not a singular one...:-)

[Ed Hart]

one could hope that life has something more interesting sprinkled around the universe...as for you, i like the sunshine on your face

[Christina May Shanaberg]

Until the last one hundred years, great forests existed that generations of man knew, since the beginning of time. Many are, now, gone! What will be the wake up call or will nature have to wait patiently to reclaim the land, after man destroys himself, too. All of the advancements of civilization seem to destroy the earth at an even higher rate. Is that called being civilized or is it being savage?! Two trees being planted for each one cut down would not be able to produce the lost quantity of oxygen being produced in our lifetime. Has man become so blind or is he only worried about his own lifetime, not that of his children?!

Lumber can be reused and becomes stronger with age. Paper can be recycled, again and again, and becomes grainier and thicker. The only one that I can't figure out is toilet paper; of course, there are lots of corncobs. LOL!

The picture you chose or the picture that chose you is wonderful and so was your poem!!

[Coyote Poetry]

Artwork and words were amazing. Artwork can make us think and create. The painting show many things to make the viewer think. I like your thoughts on the artwork. Thank you for the amazing poem.
Coyote

[sharonlee]

Oh DD.... excellent rise to the challenge.... echoes mine!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Technological progress has its good and bad points... it has helped make life easier in some aspects but it has made us lose some of the human connection.

A thoughtful write, of the "maybe future?" where machines will take it over from humanity? I loved this one, as surreal as it is, with the picture, and your excellent words. Men and Machines, are always connected, infact, who programmed them is a question ;) that could be far from mother earth... the universe is neverending, stunning write love.