Chapters

I'll watch our love

like turning chapters,

throwing pages to the wind

 

I'm not sure what I am after,

So, I'll be gone, as

you read this

 

 

And don't hesitate

to hurt me,

when you find

that I am gone

 

Your soothing hands

were there to heal me,

but I just can't stay too long.

 

 

Don't bury me in wishes,

Don't let my frail heart die

 

One day,

I hope to meet him,

As I exhale that

last sigh.

Reviews

[sushi]

Amazing!!! A desire to be loved by the one you love is deeply reflected in your writing.

Thanks for sharing.

[KL]

And the author stands back, astounded, marveling at how much his Dynamic has changed since page one.

[Aven]

you are very consistent in writing good poems, something I am not. xP
well done.

[A.A.Romanczuk]

Oh beautiful...truly beautiful...wanting...longing...frail...melodic...I'm sure that one day You will meet him :)

[Bard Constantine]

Lovely writing... bittersweet feelings of both longing and hesitation... it's a hard call to know when to love, so we run despite the pull on our hearts. Beautiful writing...

[M.Kilani]

what greater than die in between the arms of the ones we seek ... sometimes we look for someone to love, instead of loving the ones we have around, thinking, no, wishing that out there someone is waiting for us .
amazing piece, hope some day you'll meet him and exhale the first sigh.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

"No page so sure that it never turns." is a lyric I think of that comes to mind here... life is always by the book, you must know when to put it down and write a short story... very creative and profound work.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This story was sad and really plays with the readers emotions.
The sentiments were very moving, but for some reason I just
didnt feel convinced by the words. Something seemed to say
that sometimes people can want or may even need to be chased.
I felt the presence of a supernatural hardened shell, but a very
gentle spirit on the inside. It seemed like superhuman bravery, but
also superhuman fear lurking in its shadow in the background.
You triggered many haunting images in my mind. You did an amazing
job of showing us all what it feels like to be at the crossroads of
trust and uncertainty.

[Crinkle°]

gorgeous!

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

soft melancholy poured from heart into a lyrical poem beautifully~