A night with Him

He's the only one who makes me feel this way....

A night with him all alone

Thoughts are washed away

Pleasure and pain slowly break me down

In this dim light, I’m getting swept away

                   

How come I feel hot just from his kisses?

His cold fingers set off fevers through my whole body with desire

Every touch makes me feel that my body’s on fire

And it’s choking me as my heart beat rises

           

It’s deafening, this heart’s loud beating

And his breath that’s whispered in my ears

My head starts spinning

 My chest aches with such pain, it causes these tears

 

All I can hear is the pounding of each heartbeat

Being wrapped in his body’s warmth

His heat had melted me before I’d realized it

Lost all my strength in his arms

 

I looked at his eyes and faced him

My mind is filled with him, completely losing my senses

And desperately hang onto him

I’m filled with joy just by his presence

 

Author's Note

Please ignore the grammar problems........

Reviews

[Dreamer]

awww i love this because I can relate to this. hmm I feel so connected, hoping he feels connected to :) I love the emotions in this/ Good job

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

This was definitely a passionate write!

[Ammanite]

aaaaaw!!! i feel the passion in this one this is amazing !:)

[Carrion.]

I love it. The large bold letters at the beginning of the stanzas make it even better.:D

[Jeremy Baker]

Beautifully flowing and conceived.

[Raven Starhawk]

Exquisitely well formed piece of extraordinary.

[tk]

a very nice poem! creatively written! =) can't help but to imagine myself in this poem.. :)

[Black]

a nice poem

[rose with love]

very sensual, romantic, a lovely poem. I enjoyed reading it

[Lily Mae]

Your heart spills onto the page... I love the "My mind is filled with him, completely losing my senses".. sweet.. x