Gone too soon

Gone too soon

A Poem by Desmund Tiny
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having you in my life is like receiving my very first gift in my life. And when I lost you..... i don't know anymore

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You always make me angry and make me cry in the end

You keep on apologizing while holding my hands

And when you say I love you and I’m sorry

With sincerity in your words, I forgive you instantly

 

Foreheads are pressed together as we cuddle tonight

With your arms that binds me to your side

You always held me with warmth and tender

In your hands, you have my heart forever

 

But these days, I am no longer loved by you

Nor treasured and needed as always you do

I wake up in this lonely room that makes me feel so cold

You already left my side, you left me with pain that makes me fold

 

My days full of laughter replaced by pain

Tears won’t stop falling, it’s like a heavy rain

In your arms I want to stay

But our pictures just faded away

 

Before I met you, I used to be alone

And now that you’re gone, I can’t go on my own

We became undone, memories hung in the midair

You’re gone too soon, it’s so unfair.

 

© 2012 Desmund Tiny


Author's Note

Desmund Tiny
I miss you so much...... soon these feelings will change but our memories, never....... =) I Love you so much.......

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I would merely want to let u know that your emotions here are well-expressed. The only problem is that you are forcing the rhyme scheme. You could have let it flow smoothly every line than thinking too much of words to make each line rhyme. But all in all, this is good. Keep writing.

...Layla...

Posted 9 Years Ago


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:) Abstract expressionism :) love this... Good Job

Posted 9 Years Ago


You've explained the complication and beauty of attraction and love eloquently here. Props.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Wonderful! The emotions are very well-conveyed. As I read this poem, I can picture every moment and feel every hurt. I am really captivated by your writing. And I liked the way that you put some emphasis on some words in the poem. They intensified the feelings.
Very very very fantastic poem! Keep it up!! :D


Posted 9 Years Ago


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Sad and beautiful. I like the colors used here. xx

Posted 9 Years Ago


Losing someone too soon is just painful...As life continues, only memories will cover everything that is left behind. Even in love...The feelings here are divine and straight to the point...Good poem...
:)))

Posted 9 Years Ago


A very expressive write...
love expressed very nicely here...
emjoyed real well :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Simply this was brilliant. Words cannot convey how engaging every line was and then the red highlighted words added a extra punch. I think it was expressed marvelously.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Simply this was brilliant. Words cannot convey how engaging every line was and then the red highlighted words added a extra punch. I think it was expressed marvelously.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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tk
ouch..... :'( this made me remember the happiest days i once had with him.. and now all i have are those painful memories... *sighs*
anyway, this is a really poignant poem about losing someone we love. many can relate to this.. :) the emotions are outpouring, and the words are flowing smoothly.. it is also very creative of you to change the color of some words that you want to emphasize. it made the whole piece very interesting.. :) a really enjoyable write! ^_^
♥♥♥

Posted 9 Years Ago


I thought this was a very nicely written piece. I love the message within the poem as well. It is expressive. I really enjoyed this. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 9 Years Ago



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I just want the name "Desmund Tiny" because it is one of my favorite character in the Novel "Darren Shan" but you can call me Des. ^^, errr.. Hello to my old writings!~ wew it's been years I gues.. more..

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