Emptiness Within

Emptiness Within

A Poem by Desmund Tiny

I feel so empty like a doll.....


I was like a lady clad in doubt and confusion

With the face painted with a fixed smile

I’m slowly rotting away under this empty sky

With the beauty that never exist, an illusion


Like a fragile porcelain doll

I am disgorged by the elegant coffin

I am fading, both my heart and soul became dull

Even if I don’t have tears, I keep on crying

I open my eyes to bear the world’s darkness

And within myself, I feel so empty

I want to scowl to world around me

But I can’t for I’m a mannequin, emotionless

© 2012 Desmund Tiny

Author's Note

Desmund Tiny
-.- it may not be that good ...... hehhehe

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Love your use of metaphors here...
very evocative piece...
awesome poem :)

Posted 9 Years Ago

I really loved this
I love darkness and stuff to do with this kind of writing.
Very nice

Posted 9 Years Ago

Sometimes we get so numb to the world we surely do feel like mannequins. but it's that heart and hope of love and life that keep us moving.. ;) well written..x

Posted 9 Years Ago

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Who knows what mannequins get up to when the shop closes for the night?
I enjoyed the read which set my mind to wondering if shop models live a secret life

Posted 9 Years Ago

A fine piece of work...
But this..."I want to scowl to world around me"...is quite confusing...
I think the word "scowl" is a facial expression for disapproval or anger involving the brows...And, yah, that line is really confusing me...Especially "to scowl to world"... o.O
Anyway, nice poem.

Posted 9 Years Ago

You don't have to cry actual tears to be weeping inside. The mannequin is an apt representation of many people.

Posted 9 Years Ago

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:) loved how you expressed your thoughts through a mannequin..
very dark and powerful.. a stunning piece.. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago

I don't know what idea this poem wants to show the readers but I like the darkness that it has. Good job.

Posted 9 Years Ago

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Added on January 27, 2012
Last Updated on January 27, 2012


Desmund Tiny
Desmund Tiny

I just want the name "Desmund Tiny" because it is one of my favorite character in the Novel "Darren Shan" but you can call me Des. ^^, errr.. Hello to my old writings!~ wew it's been years I gues.. more..


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