A new blooming Love

A new blooming Love

A Poem by Desmund Tiny
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he was there to cheer me up .... to be my partner at the Prom... Thank you so much.

"

Everyone seems so happy

As they dance so gracefully

Tonight the ladies bloom like flowers

And I was just standing there collecting dust in the corner

 

Watching the guys invite them makes me feel so sad

And the jealousy piles up in my heart

I want to scream so mad

As the pain stab me so hard

 

I was about to burst in tears

With the heavy feeling inside stirs

Suddenly he grabbed my hands

And hugged me where I stand

 

And he gently whispered to me

That no one will notice it

So it’s ok to cry on his shoulders

And that time I was a terrible sober

 

The loud music drown out my woes

While everyone is in cheers

He wiped my tears

And hold me like he’ll never let me go

 

As the night grow old sweetly

He asked me “Would you be my Muse tonight?”

I just nod and danced with him slowly

I knew that time, there’s a new love blooming in that dim light

© 2012 Desmund Tiny


Author's Note

Desmund Tiny
I just want to write this one... and please tell me if there's something off... or wrong?.... it's just a draft.....

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Very nice! Constructed nicely, simple yet elegant! BRAVO!

Posted 9 Years Ago


wow.. i like very much ;)

Posted 9 Years Ago


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that's a really good narrative piece. :)
the story was sweet and romantic. there's something in it that makes it stand out from other love poems. maybe it's because of the emotions you've put in here.
LOVED IT!! :)))

Posted 9 Years Ago


That's so sweet and lovely, loved the story in here :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Des,

It's the neatest thing when you do good that absolutely nothing counts against it... you did good.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Glad to know someone cheered you up...Nice poem.


Posted 9 Years Ago


I thought your poem was really pretty :3 I especially love the title you came up for this poem :3 so cute ^^

Posted 9 Years Ago


From its title, "A new blooming love"... your poem is blooming! :)
Terrific ideas end emotions! :D
maybe it needs some revisions in some lines.. nevertheless, it's fantastic.
I liked it! Great job! :DD


Posted 9 Years Ago


This is so beautiful!
Damn! I Loved it a thousand fold!
You did such a great job!
Hard to find such a boy haha.

~A Fallen Heroine~

Posted 9 Years Ago


nothing wrong with it, mate, it's beautiful. Though a little too needy in my opinion, but I still love it. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago



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I just want the name "Desmund Tiny" because it is one of my favorite character in the Novel "Darren Shan" but you can call me Des. ^^, errr.. Hello to my old writings!~ wew it's been years I gues.. more..

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