If Walls Could Talk

If Walls Could Talk

A Poem by Destinee
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From my mouth the darkest crimes would bloom.

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If I could talk, 
If I could tell you everything I’ve seen,
I could tell you stories you would never want to believe.
No one knows what I have seen with my all-seeing eyes.
No one is alive to tell the secrets I’ve overheard.

I’ve seen little pieces of heaven and little pieces of hell
I’ve heard whispers of tenderness and screams of hatred
I’ve seen love spoken to one and given to another
I’ve heard a heart breaking and footsteps leaving.

Oh, How hard it is to watch life fade away,
How hard it is to watch love grow cold,
How hard it is to listen to every pained cry,
How hard it is to bear witness to these images
And be unable to speak one word.

You will never hear from me.
My mouth is shut, but my eyes and ears are forever open.
It is my curse, to be able to stand so tall, so straight, so strong.

To bear the weight of the world 
To hold the roof over the murder’s head and be unable to break
To shelter the demons of the world and separate the angels

I cannot tell you whom exactly I’ve seen.
I cannot tell you what exactly I’ve heard.

But if walls could talk

I would.

© 2010 Destinee


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Parts of this I really relate to: "I could tell you stories you would never want to believe."

A good thing is if walls did speak you could listen to their stories while having a pint or two. You could get drunk next to bricks! And it would be an entirely sane thing. Would be a good excuse atleast ;-)

A very good piece. Kudos!

Posted 14 Years Ago


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This is a very well written piece that tells an excellent story without actually telling a story - kinda like a wall. You can look at a wall and get a sense of its history with a glance but you will never know all the details. This was superbly done.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

My favorite lines:
"If I could tell you everything I’ve seen,
I could tell you stories you would never want to believe."
"You will never hear from me.
My mouth is shut, but my eyes and ears are forever open."

You've given excellent voice to the speechless, Destinee, well done!

Posted 14 Years Ago


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That is, i really can't find words to describe it, i absoultley loved it!! and it is so true, all the way. :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


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Posted 14 Years Ago


An excellent piece Destinee. The poem works well as a buildup to your final lines at the end, which in turn are an excellent reveal. The concept of the fact that all things have a witness is an old one, and your poem really continues to show through this old saying. A wonderful piece I sincerely enjoyed reading.

Posted 14 Years Ago


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Wow, what a powerful poem!!! I really enjoyed reading this! The repetition was done beautifully, as were the images you created! I particularly enjoyed one of the last stanzas beginning with "To bear the weight of the world" that stanza was gorgeous, and very unique in it's message. Great job! :D

Posted 14 Years Ago


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I loved this. I think you could have taken the metaphor further and explored some deeper ideas of what walls may see other than just heartbreak or cruelty but i can't complain about the execution.
I think you really hit the metaphor on the head right here:
It is my curse, to be able to stand so tall, so straight, so strong.
To bear the weight of the world
To hold the roof over the murder’s head and be unable to break
To shelter the demons of the world and separate the angels

I really like the concept and the message. Very well done :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


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I loved the poem and the idea and everything about it. Very well done =)

Posted 14 Years Ago


Firstly, I love the end of this piece! The reality of this piece, makes me really believe that you could tell me stories that I wouldn't want to believe! This is a haunting piece...I enjoyed reading it. It was absolutely wonderful!

Posted 14 Years Ago


this was a wonderful poem, i had never seen the walls in such a way until now, this was very creative and the imagery was brilliant. so great job ^^

Posted 14 Years Ago


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