Flakey Boys

Flakey Boys

A Poem by Destinyxi
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Inspired by The Reviewers poem 'Flakey Girls'. This is the boys version of it. Enjoy!

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Flakey Boys

 

You know they look good

These flakey boys

They put on that smile

And you buy it

 

They reel you in

They’re in it for the catch

You’re the fish

And they’re the fishermen

 

They just want to get wet

It’s a typical one night stand

They’re booking their schedules

She’s today, she’s tomorrow

 

And they flirt

They flirt so sweet

They kiss so good

And they look so nice, wanting and hard

 

You know it won’t last

But for the moments

That he takes you

You think it’s worth it

 

Where’s your pride, darling?

He’s just leading you on

He’ll ride you till you’re out of gas

Till your engine stops running

Then he’s going to jump start another car

And continuously repeat

Till he gets to his destination

 

Don’t be another car

Just another ride

A brick to step on

Something flat to travel along

 

Find your pride

And find someone who rides you

Just as much as you ride them

So if your engine breaks

So will his

And you’ll be stuck, side by side

Unable to drive to a new destination

 

Ah, these flakey boys

They’re in it for the catch

They’re in it for the ride

Ride ‘em back

Ignite your pride

Shake them till they’re all out

Of flakes 

© 2012 Destinyxi


Author's Note

Destinyxi
If you liked this poem, check out the poem that inspired this one!

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/The-Reviewer/1019995/

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Great poem. That is some hot guy in the picture. He's even turning me on and I'm straight. He has to be gay. No straight guy is that hot. I mean I''m a straight guy and look at my picture. I'm really short and I have a bad hair cut. Sure I'm cute, even adorable, but hot? Nota.

Posted 9 Years Ago


That_Girl

9 Years Ago

Don't even think like that.... of course he's straight. He has to be.

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Baby Ricochet

9 Years Ago

Maybe he's straight. It's a long shot though.
That_Girl

9 Years Ago

*shrugs* Weirder things have happened.
Wow, this should be like a freakin anthem for all the girls that have been played by boys like this!!! Great write!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Kes
Haha, I love this! The last line really made me smile. :)
You're just a strong writer. I just love it.
K

Posted 9 Years Ago


simply wow. I hate flakey boys. thank u for writing this. im tired of being led on by these types of boys. bravo.


the guy in the pic is very cute LOL

Posted 9 Years Ago


Brilliantly written!

Posted 9 Years Ago


nice poem but a very delicate structure good work

Posted 9 Years Ago


Loved this :) The free structure worked well but I'd be more incined to admire the meaning behind the poem. Makes you wonder if those Flakey ones will ever get to that destination of theirs...

Posted 9 Years Ago


Crazy Cat Man

9 Years Ago

flakey ones are sociopaths. they know what they are doing. thats why we must stay away from them. th.. read more
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C.
This should be made into a song or something haha

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Hahaha I LOVE this!! It's the perfect other half! Too bad the guy in the picture is hella cute... all the players are though! ;) Lovely!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Destinyxi

9 Years Ago

Haha, he is cute isn't he? When I saw the picture, I knew I just had to use it. I'm glad you liked t.. read more
Crazy Cat Man

9 Years Ago

I used Kat Von D for my pic :P she just seems flakey :P the guy pic made me laugh lol
That_Girl

9 Years Ago

He is cute in a boyish way! Good choice!
I agree that the car metaphors go really well with the topic. I enjoyed reading this since I know so many "flakey" boys. I hate how they trick us and make us complete fools with their games they play us with. Then leave us when we decide not to play their little games anymore and move on with someone new!

"Find your pride
And find someone who rides you
Just as much as you ride them
So if your engine breaks
So will his
And you'll be stuck, side by side
Unable to drive to a new destination" That's my favorite stanze, it stands out the most to me! That's true that we need to find someone as we treat them. I know a lot of people deserve a lot better treatment than what they've been put through, including myself. Well done! :)


Ashley Rivers-- Keep writing! :D

Posted 9 Years Ago


Destinyxi

9 Years Ago

Agreed, thank you for the review Ashley! :)
Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect

9 Years Ago

You're very welcome :D

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