Burning Bridges

Burning Bridges

A Poem by Destinyxi
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I do NOT usually rhyme, bear with me >.<

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Burning Bridges

 

Move on

I’ll move on too

Let me go

I’ll release you too

 

I’m all out of energy

My battery is running on empty

Efforts all wasted

New hurt created

 

Walk away

Leave my world grey

Cross the street

Leave me incomplete

 

We entwined and breathed

The same exact air

But now I long for freedom

Something we can’t share

 

And I waited

Would have rather been hated

At least then I would have known

And you would have shown

I wasn’t the one

And I would have gone

 

But time I did waste

Now I’m leaving in haste

Let me live while I’m young

Die when I’m old

No more being left in the cold

 

I’m chasing the sun

The heat

I’m nothing but done

New sheet

 

A whole new book to write in

I’m starting out fresh

I’m going places I’ve never been

Searching for different flesh

 

And I’m anywhere but here

Anywhere but near

The pain I cannot bear

From pain I must spare

 

I’ll see you when I’m older

When I’m stronger

When I can face facts

And put on an act

A fake smile just for you

A fake smile for two

 

I’m moving on

Release me

Must leave before dawn

Because I’m chasing the sun

The heat

© 2012 Destinyxi


Author's Note

Destinyxi
What do you guys think? I don't usually rhyme my work..if you liked this poem, then should I write more poems that rhyme or stick to my usual style?

No format used, not all words rhyme :P I just rhymed randomly.

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Kes
I love this! The metaphor of chasing the sun is great. And I really liked the rhyming too, random or not. I just sometimes think it can add a bit of flow that it's difficult to create without - although you've always managed it brilliantly!
Great work!
K

Posted 10 Years Ago


A very good poem. I like the flow of thoughts.
'A whole new book to write in
I’m starting out fresh"
Good to have an destination and the sun in view. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 10 Years Ago


luving rhyme..i luved every single stanza..fun in read :)



Posted 10 Years Ago


I think it added more drama when you added non rhyming lines. Makes sure the readers paying attention, and when you read it aloud you have to kind of say it differently. I got the pain in this poem clearly, and the struggle for a new start. I thought it was beautiful, but all your work is beautiful! I'm never disappointed.

Posted 10 Years Ago


I think the rhymes work well! I think you should definatley write more in this style to see what you can do! I liek your usual style too but its always good to experiment with different things! Good job!

Posted 10 Years Ago


I really like this one. I was in a situation much like this one last year. There's nothing quite like knowing that you're being strung along but not having enough oomph to get out of the situation by yourself.

You're rhyming was absolutely brilliant too!

Posted 10 Years Ago


You rhymed well, and the poem flowed greatly. So sad though, a lass as beautiful and awesome as you ought to have her pick of gents. You'll find someone better though, someone who will treat you as you deserve. Great work, as always comes from you!

Posted 10 Years Ago


You can rhyme, Kels :) There are no limits on what you can write...you've proven to be pretty diverse as of late with the different styles you're presenting :)

Btw, are you getting my RRs? I haven't heard much from you on the last several things I've put out...then again, it's been a lot of experimental stuff so I don't know if that stuff does all that much for you lol :P

Posted 10 Years Ago


Destinyxi

10 Years Ago

Thank jesus I can rhyme then :P

I am getting your RRs, as well as everyone elses. I jus.. read more
kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Haha yes you can :) That's okay, I just wanted to make sure they were getting through...whenever yo.. read more
Even though there was no format, this came out really nice. The rhyming isn't forced and that's what matters. I love it! I think you should continue with your usual style AND add in some other stuff like this. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Destinyxi

10 Years Ago

No, this is another one. The other guy I haven't spoken to much lately, he's on vacation :P (getting.. read more
That_Girl

10 Years Ago

Ahhh. Haha nice! Well, regardless, great poem! Hope things work out. :) Don't you dare settle though.. read more
Destinyxi

10 Years Ago

Thank you, glad you liked it!

And not to worry, I don't plan to settle just yet :P

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