Keep

Keep

 

Make me

Or break me

Crave me

Or discard me

Love me

Or hate me

Protect me

Or hurt me

Understand me

Or let me go

Pick me up

Or let me fall

Let me free

Or hold me tight

Hug me

Or shove me

Keep me

Or leave me

Take me in

Or leave me out

Make me smile

Or make me cry

Make me yours

Or I’ll be his

 

Reviews

[Biju]

hurt in your soul .. like abruised petal ..

[S. Michael Long]

I like this.. but its broken and maybe that's the purpose, it reflects a broken spirit.. something i know all too well, i cannot give advice on this poem from a writers standpoint, only from a broken standpoint.. (so take it or leave it as it my review may not be useful) If you intended to leave the reader feeling confused or broken, like you did when written, you succeeded.. i warn you however, this puts your conflict on the reader, we are made to explain the problems you face, when in all reality, we want to hear the problem not fix it.. your skill is well crafted, you use commanding style (which i appreciate) however, the poem leaves too much conflict for the reader.. how can i put this..its open ended, and leaves the reader with a debt that we feel like we have to pay.. or we feel like we have to understand something that you have not yet explained in your beautiful words.. (: As i said before, i love this.. take this and forge an epic poem, out of a very well written purposeful poem (: great write.. thanks ! -s

[Princess Derion]

I love this poem!!

[khalid]

i have really enjoyed reading reading this poem. i have enjoyed the images and contrasts you have mentioned here. i love the simple words you have picked which is connected to the topic of the poem itself...you wanted to say that the issue is simple..let me be yours or i will be his..so you used very simple words with clear contrast to make things clear..this is really very professional. in short, i have really enjoyed this great poem...thank you for sharing

[Johnny Joe]

I like this one!!! That last line made me say "hell yeah" out loud. Very good write. I love the directness in your words.

[Kes]

Oooh, I like the last line! I didn't see that coming.
Tough poem. I really enjoyed it. :P
Great write, keep up the hard work!
K

[Monica]

Make me yours
Or I’ll be his

...I love, love, love this poem! I have been there, done that! Making an ultimatum like that, is usually not worth it...that's one that should never have to exist.
your words are powerful and strong and heartfelt.
Well done!!

[Henry]

A woman with an ultimatum should not be messed with.