On that Night I Learnt How Grasping Was The Diamond Spell

On that Night I Learnt How Grasping Was The Diamond Spell

A Poem by Dinali Sathma
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An admiration

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  • We stood gazing high

    staring into the celestial

    when church bells were nigh

    hearing to the pedestrian


    the beauty of the twinkling stars

    did not make me hush

    the puny of the passing cars

    did now make me rush


    ceaseless went my chattering mouth

    but your gape was fixed in its sight

    endless watch of the mastering skies

    shut, my eyes too lifted to the night

  • Quietude of the yard entwine

    smell of jasmine reached my nose

    Quick it changed my past opine

    soon it fasten to breach my pose


    air grew thick and the curtains untied fell

    I think I slept on the floor

    but he carried me in .. then there was smile when he closed the door

    on that eventide, I first learnt how grasping was the diamond spell

© 2012 Dinali Sathma


Author's Note

Dinali Sathma
any suggestions for improvement?

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Another great write from you! I really enjoyed how you, like quinfinn said, made the words come alive and made a visual masterpiece. Still can't wait for more!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Dinali Sathma

9 Years Ago

Thank You
in the third stanza, change eye to eyes....fourth stanza, fasten should be fastened...fifth stanza/first line, think is supposed to be thick and ...learnt should properly be learned, but i prefer learnt! this poem is amazing! i think it is a visual masterpiece and desrves a place in my favorites. well done, poet!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Dinali Sathma

9 Years Ago

Thank you a lot. I'll make a note to change all that.

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Dinali Sathma
Dinali Sathma

Negombo, Gampaha, Sri Lanka



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