Rejection

Nothing hurts more than hearing you say no

I thought you loved me but now I know

Swallowing my emotions, not letting them show

I used to belive but that was long ago

 

No more butterflies when were together

I just knew that felling would last forever

My heart has been ripped out and your the reaper

Even if your gone my ove grows deeper

 

Never give up on what you feel is true

Sorrry Cristina, but I have given up on you

I admit that you made me feel blue

But I have to move on, I have to

 

So goodbye to you and this feeling

I feel like a fool for just beliving

But from this point on I'm not crying

From this point on I'm only accepting

 

 

 

Dustin S. Davis

December 4. 2009

 

Reviews

[Stephen Scaggs]

Not bad. Not bad at all. I like the AAAA rhyming sequence pattern, it has a nice flow... nice rhythm. Tragically beautiful, but I am not really the best person to criticize works of poetry. If anything, I'd work more on is developing a more unique writing structure. Something you don't find in text books - the wonderful thing about poetry is that it is an out pour of whatever it is that you want it to be. I rate this poem out of a 9.5/10. Keep it up. ^_^

[sheila russ]

Rejection is one of my biggest hang up. You really did a good job on this poem and see your pain in this poem. keep your head up and stay strong, because love sometime can be blind.
Great Job!

[Aislinn Gryffin ((Ashes..]

3 mistakes that i caught:
1))"ove" in line 8
2)) "Sorrry" in line 9
3)) "belive" in 4 and "beliving" in line 14.
Other than that, i really love this. it has a great natural flow to it and it's beautiful.

[talulu love]

Even if your gone my ove grows deeper...grammar mistake its love instead of ove...but otherwise good ...ur really good with poetry keep it up

[A Touch of Insanity:)]

Really beautiful poem. Just curious, but what's with the name at the bottom?

[Tate Morgan]

By far your best to date that I have seen I felt it
tate

[indieRokker]

Loves a precious gift, one of the easiest things to gain yet the hardest thing to lose.
"Never give up on what you feel is true"
I Loved this line it gives us a sene of what it is we should turly feel, to follow our hearts and feelings.
Well put, this was a beautiful poem :) It flowed very well and the rhymings were greats.
thanks for sharing
indie♥

[Thomas B. Buckman]

Well put.
Young love is a trifling mistress.

Great read.

[misha]

Great job on this poem.