The Vacuum Disaster

The Vacuum Disaster

A Book by Some Random Person.


© 2011 Some Random Person.


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Some Random Person.
A fun little story I got the idea off of the TAKS Test.... Maybe it's a good thing we take them?

No summery yet. Not spoilling it for you. SOrry. Can you find an evil vacuum picture to use as the cover?

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I must say it really is good thing you take them, fun and frollics to be had by all.

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Posted 9 Years Ago


Overall, I would say you have a fun little tale beginning with these two chapters. It has it's fair share of spelling and other issues that wobble the flow a little, but they are things that are easily fixed. What I really liked about the story line you had brewing was the spoofing of the Adams Family, mixing it with a Vacuum Cleaner. While the Adams Family may be something everyone knows and can identify with, the idea of a out of control and evil Vacuum is new, fresh and funny.
If you choose to continue this tale, I would make one suggestion. Try to take the readers eyes and place them more onto what the Vacuum will do, and off of the actual people. After all I see the Vacuum ending up being the main character.

Great Start to a fun tale!
Wolfie

Posted 9 Years Ago


Thanks

Posted 10 Years Ago


Interesting title. I'll see if I can find something.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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