An old world afternoon

Just a little thing I thought up when thinking about how things used to be.

  

The sun is shining bright in the sky at the park

   Taking a stroll through an old world afternoon

      Couples walk hand in hand, humming a happy tune

    Dogs wag their tails with a happy bark

    I smell the scent of fresh Lilac and Pie in the air

     Who knew such a lovely day would soon turn to chaos

   The very existence of man will criss-cross

      But for now, people walk through life without a care

   The sun starts to set and the smells of Charcoal and steak drift across the hills

    I hear records crackle and pop through the old world houses

   The girls walk with their men, wearing beautiful blouses

  Who knew someone could be this high without coke or pills

   Lights from the midway flash with a bright red and purple

 Cotton candy and popcorn is the midnight snack tonight

   The Ferris wheel reaches over the clouds in an enormous height

 What a fine way to spend a day in April

Author's Note

This song actually helped alot


Hope you all enjoy! Leave a review ^*^

Reviews

[Annabelle Lee]

This is a very subdued, peaceful work. I enjoyed it. And the line fluctuation I have to say was most excellent :) The rhyme scheme helped as well, how the outer lines of the stanza seemed to pop more than the inner ones, and allowed for more of a decrescendo-crescendo effect to the reading. Bravo.

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

This was one of my favorites to write ^*^ I'm so glad you liked it :)

[Tempeste Mavys]

It's so happy! And it really made me see the setting, you used very good descriptive language.

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

:) I'm so glad you liked it, alot of people say I use alot of descriptive wording :)

[Jessica Lynn Polley]

You have a way of transporting readers to exactly where you want them to be it makes me feel like putty in your hands. I love this poem it makes me nostalgic for a time and place that I have never even been how that is even possible is beyond me. Great write!

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

Thank you so much :///) I'm so glad you liked this one :) it was one of my favorites to write ^*^

[Doreen]

A fine way to spend the day, indeed. This has a nice, nostalgic feel. Nice write.

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

Thanks :) I'm glad you liked it

[SquinklaPsyOps]

The poem could be about that sitcom writers portray a segment of life emotions that give us examples of what is worth living for, that is why I admire the Disney Channel writers, and also that by interacting and respecting other persons is the way to flow

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

I wrote this in the point of view of a boy medium in the 30's taking a daily stroll through the park, but sees in the future what's going to happen. I modeled it as non fiction so the future he sees goes along with how screwed up today's society is

[Matching Socks]

Such a beautiful stroll! :)
Wonderful imagery. You are very talented.
Also, please continue to feel high without coke or pills. Thank you.

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

I'm so glad you like it :D

[JayyVonMonroe'sBae]

love it love it love it love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

This poem is amazing, it's very descriptive. Nicely written.

Kaze~:-)

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

Thank you so much ^*^

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome, it was my pleasure reading your poem. :-)

[Bluefire]

I like how you meantion it'll all turn to chaos, makes me think of an old film where it's all calm til the aliens attack.
I also like the picture you painted, the street, the lights, the peoples.
Well done! ^^

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

Thanks so much baby :D

[Bluefire]

You're welcome, babe ^^