King of Flawed Reason

Festering molestation of achin'...

I'm separated by my own demons, my own feelings leapt alive with meanin'...

I'm crowning myself king of flawed reason...

For the reason I stand alone most the time...

Is I'm not feeling very grown at the time...

Like a seed with no warmth, a man outta lines, my rhymes are not good enough...

I stow it under and keep grumblin', actin' tough, mining away and wondering if it will ever be true...

Will I follow a shining path or break hollow and used...

Blasted by traces of iced gas, leaving me numb and bruised...

A rats uncle I'm stuffy and masked, you are sultry and out of grasp...

So I gasp and raise myself above the bar, I raise my own bar...

The imperfection flawed is tar that stops and harms...

Will I garner enough force to engulf mars...

Or will I fall hard and overwhelmed...

Just scars...

Author's Note

Sometimes depression is crippling... Hope everyone reading this remembers they are not alone in the fight... Keep living day-to-day, and know you are valued... Have a good one

Reviews

[Vasilees Sybissyl]

This is so abstract, and so beautiful, just as always. I specially love the lines,

"The imperfection flawed is tar that stops and harms...
Will I garner enough force to engulf mars...
Or will I fall hard and overwhelmed...
Just scars..."

Just so beautiful.

Love,
Vasilees

[Chase Dylan]

As always, a beautiful review, Vasilees, thank you, and am glad you enjoyed

[Raven Moonchild]

(hugs) No one depressed should ever be alone. I had a loved one depressed for five years, and I did my best to be their ray of sunlight.

This poem brought tears to my eyes. :) Brilliant job again, my friend. You've captured human emotion like a spider captures a fly.

[Chase Dylan]

A ray of sunlight, I could totally see you being, Raven... Thank you so much, and I hope it was tears of joy...
How about I am like a dream catcher, because spiders are the scariest things EVER....

[Raven Moonchild]

Spiders are scary little buggers, but they are helpful. lol

And yes, you are like a dream catcher, capturing the raw emotions that fly through our dreams.

[Carol Cashes]

"So I gasp and raise myself above the bar, I raise my own bar..."

Indeed! And every time I read one of your poems, you have raised the bar yet again. I didn't so much read "depression" as "reflection" in this. But, I can be pretty dense for a smart woman, or so I've been told by those brave enough to tell me that!

[Chase Dylan]

Carol! Thank you so much, and you are spot-on, this was my reflecting upon how depression has no real right in my life, and is only around because I let it be...

[emipoemi]

You've done it again! You're repetition of "reason" in close proximity kind of makes me wonder whether you've gone off your game, for I don't recall any of your other work internally rhyming with the same word (this is a point where the first "reason" would normally have a rhyme but instead of one we get "reason" again). Can't quite decide whether it's part of the whole message (the first "reason" is also paired with "flawed" which makes the second have a more humorous meaning), or a mishap on your part, but regardless, this is another gem! Well done!

[Chase Dylan]

Heh, def' not a mishap, Emi... Just making it a bit more relatable and easy to read... I do so very love the use of repeated rhymes, just has to be VERY carefully done... Thank you, and I am so very glad you found this gem-worthy

[jacob erin-cilberto]

really like how this is shaped...the rhythm is perfection...reminds me somewhat of Go West singing "I'm the king of wishful thinkin'"
and your rhymes are absolutely "good enough" better than "good enough"---

[Chase Dylan]

You are an absolute joy to read, Jacob, and an inspiration, as always... I thank you very much for the encouragement, seriously...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

We stand together in feeling like this then :P
I think you needn't worry, btw. Your rhymes are really kickass ;)
Oh and this was the first write of yours that I didn't have to reread to understand haha ;P
Though melancholic, your flow here is remarkable as always, Silente.

"So I gasp and raise myself above the bar, I raise my own bar..."
Loved this line. :)

[Chase Dylan]

Thank you, Yumna, I am glad the relatability bleeds through on this one. Even sad people can have good flow, right? Hah...
Seems I am making progress, then, if you did not have to pull out the magnifying glass

[Dr. YumnaKay]

haha I think 'I' am making progress in understanding your writes lol :P
I'd say better flow comes with sadness... Poets are said to be wallowing in grief ;)
You're welcome, D. A pleasure always :))

[Chase Dylan]

I gotta post what you sent me before, still, sozz, been so caught up in my own silliness... Hmm, maybe we are both growing, how about that?
Well, if that is what is said about poets... I am sure to be a poet...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I wonder how your silliness looks like haha ;P
Yes, I think I'd agree on that lol growth is good and I def need some ;P
Acc to that definition, maybe I am too but I choose not to be ;)

[Chase Dylan]

It looks decrepit and morbid, a silliness not silly in any factually real reality, hah...
You are right, you are a poetess... Difference

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Haha def casts a morbid picture lol
You're funny, poetess makes me sound so old ;p

[Chase Dylan]

Yumna, I would never do that to you... I have tremendous respect for my elders

[Dr. YumnaKay]

lmaoo now really am I that old?! haha maybe experience wise in being funny, I am ;P ;P

[Chase Dylan]

Speak like Yoda, only the old ones do

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Err what? ... you lost me lol

[Chase Dylan]

Yoda, from star wars...?!?!?! Cause you... Never mind... Hahaha... Just ignore me, I make references without thinking... You are older than the oldest of old, so old, in fact, I am astonished no one else has realized the truth... You are a vampire

[Dr. YumnaKay]

haha I've never been a star wars fan ;p but hey if you know the star wars from that old then it means you're the old one here! *insert smart face with shades here :P
Yeah I suck blood to bleed out words hahahah

[Chase Dylan]

Your logic impresses me, you win, but then again... I would expect nothing less from a thousand+ year creature of the night...
How have I NEVER written that...
I suck out blood just to make the words squirt, what a rush...
And now.... I have written it

[Dr. YumnaKay]

lmao you're better at humour than I give you credit for ;)
And you must admit, you got this thought from me haha and so, we bleed ..................

[Chase Dylan]

I admit nothing.... NOTHING....!
*Whispers*
nothing..............

[RolandDee]

Gee wilickers boys and girls… I wonder why this vacuous SJW d********g ran away with his tail between his legs? I wonder why that "social writing site" turned out to be a fake effort abandoned almost immediately by it's own creator?

Eggregious hypocritical virtue signaling bully games never work out in the long run. I'm glad you realized how embarrassing your actions were/are. Maybe if you had some substance behind your populist rage you'd be worth something... but alas... you turned out to truly be intellectually vacuous.

And I'm not even going to get into the plagiarism accusations against you. (which is probably the real reason you ran away like the coward you truly are.)

If you play stupid games, you win stupid prizes. Enjoy your shame. I hope you learned something.


Regards,

-- you know who this is... I never blocked you, ya coward. Despite all of your bullshit... you are still welcome to say whatever you want to me publicly or privately. And if you had any balls, personal integrity or honor you wouldn't have had to scurry away like you did. We could of talked like men and I would have been more than happy to debate you. You chose to act like an SJW bully. You did this to yourself...

(also, stop plagiarizing other peoples work... if your that intellectually bankrupt you have to resort to that s**t... maybe writing just isn't for you)

I look forward to your further cowardly silence.