An ancient love story

An ancient love story

A Poem by 外人 (Gaijin)
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Inspired by a Brazilian soap opera (Gabriela, a soap opera that takes place in the '20s), decided to write about love stories the way they used to be ... how I wish I could live one of them :(

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Bring me back to the time when for my fair true love,
I'd recite my love poems,
fearless, to her parents I'd
ask permission to court her, yes I hope they'd say.

Bring me back to the time when for my happiness,
I'd walk her through the city
hand by hand, under the moon
I'd dare to ask her a kiss and true love we'd share.

Bring me back to the time when for my fair true love,
enormous respect I'd have,
her body'd be a temple,
unavailable 'till God gives us its blessing.

Bring me back to the time when for my happiness,
I'd make it all official,
on my knees I'd ask her to
be mine, with the most beautiful engagement ring.

© 2012 外人 (Gaijin)


Author's Note

外人 (Gaijin)
I decided to focus on metrica this time, no rhymes, this time I focused only on creating 12-7-7-12 syllables stanzas. Love or hate it?

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I liked it, it brings back the simpler times where men had honor an loyalty. Also, it seemed very mature for a teenager. An being a teenager myself, I gotta say. Very good job hun. I hope to hear more poetry from you, an would like a review of some of my own poetry.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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外人 (Gaijin)

10 Years Ago

Thank you very much for your compliments, your review was very appreciated :) Though, I have more th.. read more
~FALL3N-ANG3L~

10 Years Ago

Your welcome, an thank you. (: Have a good day now.



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Love it - love poetry written in a classic style, one of the best poems you have written - excellent !

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sounds like the man is very respectful and has honor. lucky girl.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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外人 (Gaijin)

10 Years Ago

Thank you for the compliments, I'm the man wishing all these stuff ... though the "lucky" girl, I ju.. read more
This was wonderful Domenico :) A sweet touch to chivalry

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

外人 (Gaijin)

10 Years Ago

Thx =D
A most wonderful write!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

excellent and very mature,i like prose type poems, a read for mature minds, well done sir.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

外人 (Gaijin)

10 Years Ago

Thank you :) Btw, it's in verses, they just don't rhyme xD
A beautiful poem of love. I like the flow of the poem and the hope in the words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lovely write , hankering for the simplicity of the past.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

awwwwwwww so sweet ...i love it of course ....well done

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is so romantic x.x Great write!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

外人 (Gaijin)

10 Years Ago

Thank you :)
Aww really sweet poem! It's really cute :) Love it!! < 3

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

&#22806;&#20154; (Gaijin)

10 Years Ago

thank you very much ;)

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Added on August 20, 2012
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外人 (Gaijin)

London, United Kingdom



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