The morning

Been forced to write it for English class, hope you like it :)

Shy, the sun shines,

its pinky light kills the night,

a new day comes from the highest heights,

new hopes, new goals come with the sunrise.

Evil darkness fades away,

as Sol and his mighty horses bring us the sun,

witches and giants power have none,

while Freyr's star keeps dangers away.

A new day within me grows,

a sparking light nobody knows,

the fire I need, to get on my feet

and fight against my fears.

Author's Note

Put some viking mythology inside the poem to make a boring homework be a bit more fun (I LOVE vikings), so:
Sol in viking mythology is the one who carries the truck of the Sun,
Freyr is the god of the Sun's light (and many other stuff ...)
Witches and Giants were considered evil beings by viking mythology
The whole poem is based on the viking concept of the dawn as a temporary victory of the positive powers of light upon the negative ones of the darkness.

Reviews

[Constance Payne]

"witches and giants power have none" should have read "witches' and giants' power have none"

"Evil darkness fades away,
as Sol and his mighty horses bring us the sun"

These lines give a wonderful mental image of a powerful man riding in a chariot being pulled by 4 horses (2 black 2 white) dragging behind him a glowing ball that brightens as it moves pat the horizon.
I love movies about mythology....might need to read some ....
Wonderfully done

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Excellent read and write.

[Writer #00]

witches and giants power have none-->witches' and giants' (possessive?) They possess the power.

I loved this window into another culture's view of dawn. From your notes, the viking concept of dawn sounds a lot like the Aztecan concept of dawn...only the Aztecs would sometimes stab themselves and offer their blood to the sun god (name's too long to type and too hard to pronounce) so as to strengthen it in its battle against the moon and stars. Sunrise would be a sort of victory in this sense, too.

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[外人 (Gaijin)]

Well actually the real order of the sentence would be: Witches and giants have no power, so basically witches and giants are not possessive but subjects.
Really? That's very interesting !!! Vikings have been the first European people to discover America and it is known they had a contact with American people so maybe they have influenced each other :) Don't know xD
It's so cool to find another person so interested in religion/mythology/anthropology =D

[Writer #00]

Oh, I see now. That makes sense. Disregard that whole possessive bit. Yep, I'm mainly into the religion/mythology tad, though.

[外人 (Gaijin)]

Especially Aztecan's ones?

[Cole Hayley]

I like it, really good actually.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

I adore your sense of power, it comes form most and none at all - one to think upon!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

very entertaining and a great rhyming scheme I felt, well done

[Devanshu Rajput]

an effective piece describing the sunrise.....first stanzas rhyme was really excellent....

''Shy, the sun shines,
its pinky light kills the night,
a new day comes from the highest heights,
new hopes, new goals come with the sunrise'' are my fav lines..... thanks for sharing the great piece....12 lined poem remained me speechless.....you should not leave the poem untitled....for me it should be ''THE MORNING''

[外人 (Gaijin)]

Thank you very much =D Well, I actually left it unititled because I hate creating titles ahahah The morning sounds great, I guess we got a title =D

[Devanshu Rajput]

oh! you put the name....welcome

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good poem. I like the feel of motivation and hope in the words. Good to test your skill. You did well. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

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Great poem and beautiful imagery :) I really enjoyed the ending:

"A new day within me grows,
a sparking light nobody knows,
the fire I need, to get on my feet
and fight against my fears."

Great job

[MandaBear]

Great poem! and I too love the Vikings =) I like learning about them

[外人 (Gaijin)]

they're so cool *_______________*

[Leslie Philibert]

a writer that I know and admire, like the way here that he has done some research here
as a background, it shows, a interesting poem that works and impresses..

[外人 (Gaijin)]

Thank you very much !! =D