Riddle C

Riddle C

A Poem by 外人 (Gaijin)
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Please, give me your opinions about it and try to guess the answer :)

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My colours can be found all over the world,
you all know me for them,
Green, Yellow, Blue and all their friends belong to me.

After an angry storm, people look at the sky waiting for me,
because i am the message of peace it sends to them,
but just for a few hours, my lord allows me to be in this world.

I'm a bridge made by no stone, touched by no human hand,
just a shy inverted smile, linking earth with the sky,
in an everlasting friendship, no soul will ever break.

This is me, and that is the riddle you decided to take,
so tell me the answer, tell me who i am, don't be shy !
Just don't hope for any clues, i won't give you a hand.

© 2012 外人 (Gaijin)


Author's Note

外人 (Gaijin)
Ok, that particular poem is strange for me: I don't like it, no matter how many changes i've done on it, i still don't like it ... but i don't dislike it enough to delete it (i usually delete the 45%, more or less, of my poems) so i wait for your judgments, be honest, please !!
Tried to "create" my personal rhyme scheme (hoping it doesn't exist yet xD): ABC CBA DEF FED
The answer is ... Rainbow.

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Oh this is a rainbow :) I hope you know this wonderful as it is. I'm actually glad that you saved this one. Since it's really beautiful and described really well. Frankly, you do such a marvelous job riddles anyways. Keep up the good work.
Outstanding!

Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG:)

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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A crafted carcaphony of colours!

Posted 11 Years Ago


I love how you wrote about the rainbow in a riddle, beautiful. Love the descriptions placed for the the riddle. As for your author's note, I dislike that you delete your writes, you should keep them. And this one included, even if you dislike them, someone will enjoy and love 'em, do not waste them. As for the rhyme scheme, nice that you have fun doing those. How can you not like this poem though? It's beautiful.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is sooo a Rainbow!!!!!!!!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RAINBOW :))))

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like the description. Some beauty is for the lucky to see. Thank you for your interesting thoughts and riddle. A excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

oh is it a rainbow and i love it

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It's a rainbow. There's no question in my mind that says otherwise.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Is it a rainbow?

And I don't see anything wrong with this poem, other than the fact that the last stanza isn't really needed.

:)

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

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Rainbow! Haha, nice poem though. Really good but I admit I liked riddle B a tad bit more. Keep writing!

Posted 11 Years Ago


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外人 (Gaijin)

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