Monkey See

Monkey See

A Poem by Dominick

 

Monkey See

A Poem by Dominick

 

 

Little by little we whittle

 

wondrous works of wood.

 

Pity, so witty, cute kitty, neat ditty,

 

only this shaky, shallow, shadow could.

 

When the pitter did patter,

 

Oh my, what's the matter?

 

He's mad as a hatter, with tongue he did splatter,

 

Itty not bitty, naughty kitty,

 

Laughing giddy, yet so pretty.

 

I'm Spam, cheap ham, wet willy Uncle Sam,

 

emotional dam but I do what I can,

 

monkey had ran

 

cause a monkey does

 

what a monkey can do.

 

 

© 2009 Dominick


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This is the most fun I've had reading a poem in a VERY long time. It makes you want to read it over and over again. "He's mad as a hatter, with tongue he did splatter" mad as a hatter is right! but in the best way possible. You have a natural ability to select just the right time to tongue twist the reader "only this shaky, shallow, shadow could" and when to break away from the rhyme altogether at the end. "I'm Spam, cheap ham, wet willy Uncle Sam" was a definite laugh out loud.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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This is the most fun I've had reading a poem in a VERY long time. It makes you want to read it over and over again. "He's mad as a hatter, with tongue he did splatter" mad as a hatter is right! but in the best way possible. You have a natural ability to select just the right time to tongue twist the reader "only this shaky, shallow, shadow could" and when to break away from the rhyme altogether at the end. "I'm Spam, cheap ham, wet willy Uncle Sam" was a definite laugh out loud.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Most people on WritersCafe that have written pieces like this, always made my slow mind go into a state of utter confusion. But I think you pulled this off well. Witty, clever, and cute.

Great Write.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very well written. Great job. Very cute.

Posted 13 Years Ago


This was such a fun time. I wanted to read it over & over. (: Best lines : "Oh my, what's the matter? / He's mad as a hatter, with tongue he did splatter, / Itty not bitty, naughty kitty, / Laughing giddy, yet so pretty." GREAT JOB WITH THIS!


Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cute!

Posted 13 Years Ago


How Dr.Seuss might sound if he extended his vocabulary (all because you mention 'ham' lol).
This is fun to read, as the flow just carries the reader along; their mind bouncing over the tongue-twisting madness. I like how there's a break from the rhymes at the end, as it makes it more of a finalising exit.

Nice work.
Thanks for posting it.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

comical , interesting and good

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

A classic for our times!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 3 people found this review constructive.

ha ha, this was hilarious. now he is a formidable man in his own right.

Posted 14 Years Ago


3 of 4 people found this review constructive.


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