A Poem

An impossible love story.

I needn’t stroke your silken hair
or touch rose petal skin.
The type of love I have for you....
it burns from deep within.

While in my soul the fires rage,
and nothing is consumed.
My spirit wanders aimlessly,
from room to darkened room.

The proper words I cannot say,
to show you my great love.
Yet here I’m staring at your face,
while you look from above.

Still my heart stirs with great desire,
to reach up and touch you.
As these feelings that I’m feeling,
I know they’re in you too.

 

But you will someday think of me,
when this book you have closed.
And I am just a memory....
and not the one you chose.

Alas...
Of all that I have looked up at,
‘tis you I wished I’d known.
For yours is a breathing spirit,
and mine.... I’m just a poem.

 

A Sean Allen Poem

© 2006 D McDaniel Hayden

Reviews

[Edward James]

With 50+ reviews, I doubt I can tell you anything new or groundbreaking as far as analysis goes, so I'll say that I really do like this poem. I'm a sucker for old fashioned rhyme schemes and rhythm, and not being a visual person, for me the aural sensation of reading a poem is quite often every bit as important as the message conveyed. Saying that, I love the pulse of this piece, and the idea that a poem (whether yours or someone else's) is observing and caring for you in the same way you do it is quite pleasant. I think I may have to reevaluate some poetry after reading this.

Nice write, I look forward to reading more

Edward

[D. Pesek]

This is an amazing piece. The whole poem was written beautifully but my favorite part was near the end when you said "Alas..." It kind of helped build up some hype in my mind as I was reading and got me excited to see how you would finish. great job, I can't wait to read more of your work in the future

[Sam Freeland]

Every time I come back to read your beautiful poem I get reinvigorated
to write and strive to make my writing have more substance and poetic
significance. The beauty of your words is so inspiring.

[OT]

wow!! brilliant poem!! and near 200 reviews? what could I possibly add! the rhyme scheme is strong with great half rhymes and the content is solid! I like the style!!! nice!

A beautifully elegant poem, a favorite :)

[Cherrie Palmer]

This poem is smooth and graceful, I love the images you create and the tender words you use to convey feelings.
This was my favorite stanza:While in my soul the fires rage, and nothing is consumed. My spirit wanders aimlessly, from room to darkened room.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Allen, this was outstanding! Your more than a writer, your a Poet!! Great write

[An owl on the moon]

This is so beautifully tender, with the richest flow and form. One finds a depth to the love expressed, and such an intriguing ending to bring us all to a close. Wonderfully written.

[Helen Woodward]

Hi Sean :-)
I did not expect the sadness that engulfed me while reading this poem, it is beautifully expressed and carries such love in its lines...enough love to reach heaven...
Amazing work~

Cheers~

Helen~

[Globy]

great flow.. really :)
Well written ..

Thumbs up!

[Tony]

I am of this opinion also.