Cast Thy Shadow

Cast Thy Shadow

A Poem by Doodley
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For 'Dee'.

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When light and dark conceive of grey,
To jade thy mind in blurred dismay,
Sink not into despairing sands,
Just cast thy shadow 'pon my hands.

When thine own strength of steeling grace,
Dispels no frowns from thy own face,
Traverse not Sorrow's bridging spans,
Just cast thy shadow 'pon my hands.

Should past regrets now linger near,
To quake thy soul in trembling fear,
Bow not thy head in sweating strands,
Just cast thy shadow 'pon my hands.

Then Icarus winged shall I soar,
To Heaven's Eye forevermore,
And bathe thee deep in sun drenched lands;
Just cast thy shadow 'pon my hands.

© 2019 Doodley


Author's Note

Doodley
Just a simple French medieval styled Kyrielle.

Any comments greatly appreciated.

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This poem leaves me with no words. Dee is a very lucky person. Such selfless love does not come every ones way, especially when packaged in a such an attractive persona and it must be pure bliss to cast them selves upon such a lovers hand. I know I couldn’t wait.

I always marvel at the depth of feelings you convey with such simplicity and clarity, adhering to the beauty of form and structure. A feat many (even me) can’t achieve even writing free verse. The opening verse has a very subtle, sublime feel, “Light and Dark conceive of Grey” to me is very symbolic. Those who have a proclivity to grey have so much light jostling with so much darkness in them! Very perceptive and insightful words there, Doodley!

The refrain reverberates, traversing a shadowy stretch, softly, lovingly insistent. Till her grey awning is pierced by the radiance of the sun within him. Till she surrenders and he absorbs her, all.

I’m so elated, the block is gone. The brilliance of your pen here says it all. You owe it to your readers to keep writing and sharing your gift with them.

P.S: The picture of the smaller hand in the larger one is very symbolic of the assurance, the expansiveness, the mutual reinforcement that embodies a solid, unshakable kind of love....

Kudos!

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Divya. I am glad you enjoyed this poem and I appreciate your ex.. read more
DIVYA

1 Year Ago

I wish you equally great things, dear Doodley. Here's wishing that your utterly giving and loving na.. read more



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Have not been on here in a while. Quickly excited to be back after reading this. Thanks for sharing. Beautiful work

Posted 3 Months Ago


This is a beautiful way to say "I'm there for you" . . . your title line is a memorable image & well-used thru-out your poem. What I love most is how you show you want to "be there" -- in ways that really reach deep into a person's heart & soul, rather than the more superficial offers of "love" that are often written about in romantic poetry (not my cup of tea). This is very powerful writing (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

4 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your time and thoughtful words.
Reading your poem actually made me a lot happy...
Happy and at peace...
Thanks for sharing doodley:)

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

5 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Neetha. I appreciate your time and kind words. Glad you enjoyed.. read more
Neetha

5 Months Ago

pleasure is mine:)
Nice repeating thoughts
with shadows in mind.
The title fits well and your words cast the spell.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

9 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Josie. I appreciate these kind words.
Josie E. Cook M. A.

9 Months Ago

You are welcome!
wow I was sold in the first stanza, i can not find a single thing i don't like about this poem! What a powerful voice you have in this one. gonna keep an eye on your work from now on, this was delicious.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

9 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Bad Bunny. I appreciate your time and kind words. Welcome to my.. read more
Beautiful just beautiful, stunning poem

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

10 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Simba. Very generous words. I appreciate them greatly. Welcome .. read more
This is such a thoughtful, considerate, beautiful poem. That gives such love, comfort and undying friendship. That can move mountains and heal someones broken soul let alone their spirit too.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

11 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Dawn. I appreciate your time and these very kind words.
Wow you are honestly such a wise and incredibly smart writer. You story tell beautifully and oh so eloquently. I can only dream of writing like you one day. The story line and structure is absolutely captivating. Keep up the incredible work.


Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

11 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Lola_Bee. Very generous words here. They are greatly appreciate.. read more
A perfect gem, well conceived and born out in classical grace and wit. You are an inspiration to us all. If I would change anything, it might be to alter a word in the line "Dispels..from thine own face." You dug deep for this one. Thank you.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

11 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Bigfootprint. I appreciate your time and comments.
As Icarus, he is not afraid to soar in her love, unafraid to perish in her blinding incandescence. Seeking to slay the shadows that traverse her pale, overcast brows with his gentle hands...
I wish such a love was forever mine...

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dhara_Ditzy Kat

11 Months Ago

Oh...I totally see your point (backs off. picks up her hat and gloves. Exits softly) :)))))))
Doodley

11 Months Ago

Closes the door behind her. Instructs two Dobermans to guard it. :)
Dhara_Ditzy Kat

11 Months Ago

ooooooooohhhhh nooooo..... ;((((((((

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Added on September 27, 2018
Last Updated on April 4, 2019
Tags: Poem, life, melancholy, hope, kyrielle, love

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