The Imaginative Mind

The Imaginative Mind

A Poem by ~Dragon X
"

I am writing about what I write. :D Spur of the moment.

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Waves crash and tumble over
the ship floats no more
nose up,
rest sunk.

Then suddenly
I'm in flowery feathery
a meadow with birds and flowers
The sun shines, darkness cowers.

The world shifts,
I am in an audience, performers dancing swift,
juggling fire and swallowing swords,
musicians playing cords.

A shouting in the distance...
A hand is waved in my face.
It's my mom.
I'm late for school again.

© 2011 ~Dragon X


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~Dragon X
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Haha, I like this a lot. :) I have definitely had those days where my mind just does not want to stay put on one thing for very long. Nicely done! :)
I know that this was spur of the moment, but I have some constructive criticism. In your second stanza, it would probably be best to delete the 'a' in front of meadow. It kind of stunts the flow of the words. Other than that, great job! :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Very nice poem! Great imagery! Loved it! I thought it would be a full poem about imagination, but the last line was really good. Made me laugh, lol.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Great ending, have me a laugh. I loved the beauty in the things you described.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Definitely, usually my thoughts are more complex though.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Hehe, I've never been late for school in my life. -nerd-
That's mainly because my mom woke me up two hours in advance? There was no room for excused, haha.

* 100 *

It's nice to be able to relate to this writing piece. :)
Great flow, the last line didn't killed the rhyming but it was still wonderful.



Posted 8 Years Ago


Yeah, I get this all the time. And I'm CERTAINLY not five. LOL I love the flow! It's a cute, totally relatable little poem. I JUST LOVE ALL YOUR POEMS!!!
~Jasmine Thousand~

*100

Posted 8 Years Ago


Haha! Yes, in fact I experience this all the time. I like spending time in my dream world, but sometimes I am disturbed. (Hate when I am.)

Funny poem and wonderful piece of write!

Posted 8 Years Ago


This sounds like a day in the mind of a five-year old dreamer. I like it.

Your use of meter is well-polished, and your word choice is nicely selected. I don't have any critiques.

Bravo.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Lol! This was happening just this morning! But I can't ever be late for school now since I'm homeschooled. Once suggestion though, maybe take out the feathery in the second stanza? Its sounds awkward. But its your poem so you decide. Its an awesome poem!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Awesome!

I experience this a lot! When I am writing my mind travels everywhere until it's disturbed...then I turn grouchy. But anyway great writing; it was very creative.

Posted 8 Years Ago


ha ha ha ..... yeah i experienced it too

Posted 8 Years Ago



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