Gone

Gone

A Poem by *~DreamDeamon~*
"

Just was in one of those moods and here is the result..

"

I am lost

lost in your memory

all I see is you and how

you hurt me

I am longing fr someone to

come and erase you

I thought you were the one

it seeems that my foolish mind

had taken control but now I

am sitting in a dark room

waiting for someone new

someone unlike you the one

who lies, cheats, and abuses

I am waiting quietly and

slowly I dissappear

I am invisable

noone sees me, im all alone

I grab for the damn razor

but i can't grasp it,

my hand starts to bleed

I can't do anything but stare

I start shaking and

hands fall on my shoulder.

A new face,a new person

he bends down and

takes me in his arms.

"im sorry i wasn't here sooner"

He whispers

Blacking out, I wake in a bed

and a room with white walls

Getting up the floor is padded

and the walls are too

I blackout once more, thinking to myself

"am I gone? have I gone crazy?"

 

© 2011 *~DreamDeamon~*


Author's Note

*~DreamDeamon~*
Ignore Grammar Problems, i d not pay attention while im writing...

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well you may not have payed attention to the grammar but the subject was carefully and nicely crafted. an excellent reference to the throes of despair,
a little disturbing but effective . nice one.

Posted 12 Years Ago


You captured the hopeless mood very well. And superb ending. It left me thinking.

Posted 12 Years Ago


yes that was the intent

Posted 13 Years Ago


"Getting up the floor is padded
and the walls are too"
Sound as if the person is locked away.

Well presented write

Posted 13 Years Ago



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