Never Warned

In this era of love or lust

a little girl is sheltered from the world.

Today she turned eighteen, so they let her free.

Shes out on her own finding that life

is not as her parents had made it.

A boy appears, he seems so nice

she thinks he's here to help.

Only now she never saw it comming

she's tied to a bed and has

been beaten in the head.

This is nothing that she was prepared for.

Her parents never warned

Now her world is shattered and broken

when this boy sets her free

she's too afraid to tell

instead she heads to her bead

with some pills, a knife and a bottle of gin

she decidesto go out with a bang.

Pills down the throat with the bottle of gin

then to cutting she goes.

As her ruby red blood falls so does she

gone forever and her last few hours shrouded in mystery

her parents cry but only for her death

they do not realize that it is all their fault

that their sheltered little girl is

       gone and away.

Reviews

[cyber dork]

i like this seeming as i'm sheltered to.... thank god for my friends and school .... dead and creative i like it ! (Y)

[Crow]

A well written piece exclaiming the loss of innocence to the extreme.

Excellent write!

[Kathryn]

That brought a little tear too my eye :'/
The structure was free and lovely, and the story you told was so belivable :) The imagery was vivid in my mind as I read this, and the accusing tone really added to the piece. Overall, the effect can be summed up in the little tear that it brought to my eye :) Great work, well done :)

[Tasha]

This was so sad, and you're right.

As her ruby red blood falls so does she

gone forever and her last few hours shrouded in mystery

her parents cry but only for her death

they do not realize that it is all their fault

that their sheltered little girl is

gone and away.
This had me in tears, you are truly amazing.

[DearSweetAgony]

Ha,I'm sorry its not right for me to laugh.
But this is exactly what my father says to my mother all the time.
I thought that was funny how that happened.
Anyway,this poem is very good.
Its actually very hard to tell a story while keeping a scheme.
But you perfected it.
Great Job!

[Dark Angel ~]

... Dark... creepy...
Parents should really stop sheltering their children so much...

[Dai Edenburough]

Very dark and chilling... I am sure that lots of people can relate to it, but I just can't grasp it...

[quinfinn]

excellent study on the perils of overprotecting your loved ones. if you don't allow them to see the world as it really is they will, sadly have their eyes wide opened later. very good poem.

[Dahlia Phoenix]

Keep writing and writing!
You got it for the best and the power behind each word is felt by the readers as they read this poem.

[ISEEYOU]

Fantastic, amazing, darn right great!

I love your poems! They are so different it makes me smile and think about how much poetry can fly though so many things in a simple verse.

Yet you make it a complex and beautiful situation, I love the emotion.