Major and Minor

Every sad story is another false key on a dusty paino

Grande or not,

It strikes a chord somewhere

Deep,

inside.

And when Death's cold fingers crash against the black keys,

The Martyr's song is played.

White keys are executed rarely,

Melodies played by every birth, by every first love, every marriage, every anniversary, every laugh...or joyful cry...

To only be hindered by a D minor

My life is a D minor..

m e l a n c h o l y

s u f f e r i n g

d e p r e s s i o n

i n s a n i t y

s u i c i d e

I play these keys blindly,

Crying with each piercing pain,

By every false strike of the keys.

I'm

falling

and

I

cannot

be 

saved.

Insanity takes root,

And 

     my

         mind

                floats

                        away...

I'm screaming but my cries and pleas will never be heard,

By the opressing notes I am forced to perform.

Every failure is punished...

But...how can I know which notes are the right ones?

I'm helpless...

I will forever suffer,destroying myself from the inside out.

I'm

falling-HELP!

and-HELP!

I-HELP!

cannot-HEL-

be-HE-

saved...

Author's Note

Reviews welcome!

Reviews

[quinfinn]

i love this, it is skillfully penned, cleverly arranged and very good prose. i love the concept of minor notes as the unwanted pieces of life, however they are "key" (pun intended) to bringing beauty to music, so that parallel works extremely well. stellar write!

[Darling Dallas]

I love it :)

[Poe Redd]

it was a joy to read this, melancholy as it is, the way you've presented the words, and the almost theatric images that flash in my head..

[Ina Waltz]

You managed to perfectly describe the struggle of a person with a mental illness. I can connect with this poem. Lovely write!

[Ethale Captor]

One of my all time favorites, This is truly amazing in every way possible. Excellent and beautiful job.

[Gobinder Singh Dhindsa]

Great work? Well döne! PEN ON..
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[sounds of shadows]

well-shaped metaphor and downward spiral - worth multiple readings to fully absorb the scene

[Jessica Gillitzer]

very original concept. This is very powerful stuff, you must play. This is beautiful, to be hindered by a D minor, this is very skillfully placed and the rest as well written. Quite the talent huh?
< 3

[Gary Motherfucking Oak]

Gary Motherfucking Oak says: This was amazing.

[Kenneth Stephen Goodpas..]

This is a very pretty poem. I always found the D-minor key the saddest key. However, this is more deeply depressing than sad. I hate to say this because it is excellently written, but it's a little cliche. It strongly yells depression and insanity, which doesn't invoke much feeling in me. The more subtle and careful the words tend to be, the more I feel drawn to a poem. I have a bad habit of strongly expressing my point at the end of my poetry, which is okay every now and then. Your write is well developed, I just don't feel very moved by it.

[Mr Dunne Poetry]

I love the imagery used here. Great job :)