My vicious halos

My vicious halos

A Poem by moog-drika

1. 

Spice of violet,

was stroked with a proud hubris

to crown cosmic win

 

2. 

the sloth’s breath moves with

a little inertia of 

indigo, for null.

 

3. 

bluish bitterness

with squeaky poise

why does envy possess them all?

 

4. 

clamor stares at me

for enthralling green. -the burp 

of greed never ends

 

5. 

drink my realism.

yellow yells for gluttony

to devour my root. 


 

6. 

sun, tastes like orange

diffuses a coppery 

smell to scorch wrath’s meat.

 

7. 

it's me who I crave,

I lust after reflection,

to sense my red wine.

© 2018 moog-drika


Author's Note

moog-drika
Played with some colorful crimes

My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Featured Review

I like the idea of playing with colorful crimes, and the 7 deadly sins have some attractive elements - a rainbow edge, you might say. Some more scattered and wicked thoughts:

1. Male pride and prowess stroked... leading to star burst... Nice
2. Lazy days, blue thoughts... Slow is nice too
3. Scratchy squeaks of protest...jealousy now a blue-eyed goddess?
4. Nature's demands, stirring the guts, insatiable.
5. Wild with desire, the golden shower shoots from its earthy spring
6. Hot burning rays of pain and pleasure assail the senses
7. Tasting the crushed fruit's juice, a mirror selfie, with hints of longing.

I love you for reviving my inanimate soul.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

moog-drika

1 Year Ago

Ahh! the best one-line interpretations of the write I can say. I think this is what happens when you.. read more



Reviews

Well, I read this a bunch of times and I like it but despite some possible help below, I need an interpreter. :) I've seen this type of writing many times before but I'm not sure what you'd call it? Abstract? Symbolism?

I realize hubris means pride, but isn't the first deadly sin lust? Hmm? I may need more time with this. haha.

Posted 1 Year Ago


moog-drika

1 Year Ago

Well I haven't followed the sequence of those 7 vices. So, you will find it kinda jumbled up haha.read more
I like the idea of playing with colorful crimes, and the 7 deadly sins have some attractive elements - a rainbow edge, you might say. Some more scattered and wicked thoughts:

1. Male pride and prowess stroked... leading to star burst... Nice
2. Lazy days, blue thoughts... Slow is nice too
3. Scratchy squeaks of protest...jealousy now a blue-eyed goddess?
4. Nature's demands, stirring the guts, insatiable.
5. Wild with desire, the golden shower shoots from its earthy spring
6. Hot burning rays of pain and pleasure assail the senses
7. Tasting the crushed fruit's juice, a mirror selfie, with hints of longing.

I love you for reviving my inanimate soul.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

moog-drika

1 Year Ago

Ahh! the best one-line interpretations of the write I can say. I think this is what happens when you.. read more
Oh wow, this is so good....most enjoyable read

Posted 1 Year Ago


moog-drika

1 Year Ago

thanks so much for the compliment. It means a lot. :'D
What a lovely haiku family!

However, number 3 does not quite follow the 5 - 7 - 5 syllable count.

Great poetry :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


moog-drika

1 Year Ago

haha I know. I tried a lot to work on it. but I kinda liked it that way. so kept it as it is. I'll t.. read more
SleeplessVolcano

1 Year Ago

Yeah, I know what you mean....like those near-perfect diamonds....the flaw it has makes it more beau.. read more
moog-drika

1 Year Ago

ahh you got that right. Thanks a bunch :'D
Very interesting read. It is certainly intriguing. I don't understand the "technical theory" behind the haiku.

But I enjoyed the read non the less

Posted 1 Year Ago


moog-drika

1 Year Ago

The only reason I like haiku is that you can speak a lot using lesser words. Otherwise I dont follow.. read more
What I like here is the haiku like compact verses, coupled with the anti-consumption theme transported with key words like crave and gluttony. So a fine poem, well written !

Posted 1 Year Ago


moog-drika

1 Year Ago

This was indeed a little attempt of haiku, except for the third one. But I'm so glad that you grabbe.. read more
Green with envy on this poem. Magnificent. Lock me up and throw the keys away.

Posted 1 Year Ago


moog-drika

1 Year Ago

Thanks a lot sweetheart for those warm words. Hope my writeups always captivate you this way. 'Hugs'.. read more
Best part is when I actually got it....I was totally mesmerised by the crimes!
You played with colourful crimes brilliantly....the 4th one was my reread....I enjoyed reading that!!
Hmm...your name absolutely suits and fits you...you're stunning!! ;)

Posted 1 Year Ago


moog-drika

1 Year Ago

😁😁😁😁😁
Tahsin.Z🍁

1 Year Ago

Good Midnight btw🌃
moog-drika

1 Year Ago

haha, good morning. and stay safe.
lol,you have broken the law,but i liked it

Posted 1 Year Ago


 wordman

1 Year Ago

the color law
moog-drika

1 Year Ago

ohh hahaha yeah! laws are meant to be broken :3
thanks so much anyway. :D
 wordman

1 Year Ago

my pleasure
I am loving your rainbow writes, they truly are spectacular. I am wondering why you used the word vicious in your title? You have created a little poem for each one of the seven colours.

Chris

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

moog-drika

1 Year Ago

Though I usually prefer to stay quiet when it comes to explaining anything about my write ups since .. read more
Christine Anne Shaw

1 Year Ago

You are very welcome and thank you for explaining.
moog-drika

1 Year Ago

It's completely my pleasure :D

Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

457 Views
11 Reviews
Rating
Added on July 27, 2018
Last Updated on August 8, 2018

Author

moog-drika
moog-drika

About
Hey this is Mugdha, a thought poker, a life giver of words. I'm mostly into dark poetry and have a great appetite for reviving inanimate souls. I think they love me for this favor but that's my motiv.. more..

Writing
Scrawl II Scrawl II

A Poem by moog-drika


Scrawl Scrawl

A Poem by moog-drika



Related Writing

People who liked this story also liked..


Dreams [10w] Dreams [10w]

A Poem by Amy R


Insomnia Insomnia

A Poem by Saumya


Sucide 1 [10w] Sucide 1 [10w]

A Poem by Amy R


Desperate Desperate

A Poem by Raghib