Undone

Undone

A Poem by David Scott

I am undone…

Purpose, once retained, now evaporate.

Disassembled, I escaped my gravity,

Chilling in the Carolina blue.

 

Conditions fall fine,

When cold is almost warm,

Yet warmth has no place to lie.

My condensation is a frozen resolve.

 

The parts of me are unrecognizable.

Fingerprinted flakes rebuild my form.

Bleached of meaning I fall fresh.

Insulating my legacy.

 

Soon I will be undone once more.

Melting into the rich soil,

Evaporating away from myself,

My wonderland a lost winter.

 

Growth flowers color upon my once empty palate,

Colorless tears of lost time painted at last.

The remains of who I was drift away,

Lost in the vastness of tear salted seas…

© 2013 David Scott


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I read this as your book of life. Ever changing, being part of it all...co-author, director, actor, audience...
The emotions of living through different phases of yourself (ourselves). I love this seasonal vision of the human condition, indeed, "undone"...forever :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


 David Scott

4 Years Ago

There is a gift, a beauty to being "undone". I'm not sure I ever appreciated it before I wrote this... read more
Aloha,

This one speaks to me of depression and sadness....lingering, hauntingly so...

Well done, you!

Alisa ;-)

Posted 4 Years Ago


 David Scott

4 Years Ago

Well howdy do from North Carolina, ;)
I was extremely depressed when I wrote this... Thankf.. read more
Alisa Js

4 Years Ago

Hello again,

Will do and Mahalo (Hawaiian for Thank you)

Alisa💫
Mmm, deep words, they resonate through me today... Each line speaking to me about the unraveling of the past, yet hoping for a beginning with purpose anew. At least this is what stands out in my heart as I read... Such a beautiful poem...

"Growth flowers color upon my once empty palate,

Colorless tears of lost time painted at last.

The remains of who I was drift away,

Lost in the vastness of tear salted seas…"

Absolutely gorgeous, I am still staggering around lost in those delicate words...




Posted 6 Years Ago


 David Scott

6 Years Ago

Thank you for seeing my heart here. Yes, you have seen more than most by your review...
No nee.. read more
Ghost of Jupiter

6 Years Ago

Ah, thank you, I feel a bit weighed down of late, so I could use a nice float..lol ;)
 David Scott

6 Years Ago

I'm sorry you feel a heavy heart. I should not feature such a despondent write even though it ends w.. read more
There are always so many elements to your superb writing. Not only the waterfall of emotional release but the essence of death...metaphorically, real and when all is shed, real death, such release is a sacrificial offering unto fate to understand the self, you are a genius x

Posted 6 Years Ago


 David Scott

6 Years Ago

Thank you dear Poppy. You have been generous to me with your words today. I am blessed to have you.. read more
Ruth

6 Years Ago

Always my pleasure hon! x
Emotions of inner feelings are well implied here. "Bleached from meaning I fall fresh". This is a unique line that stuck out to me in this piece. It leaves my mind to wonder which is exactly what a real poem should do. Awesome. Write on.

Posted 6 Years Ago


 David Scott

6 Years Ago

Oh... I like how you interpreted this line. This is often how I approach poetry when I am composing.. read more
justjenn_2u

6 Years Ago

You did well!!!
A piece that circles most emotion and dare I say it, thought for reason, well done, good read.

Posted 6 Years Ago


 David Scott

6 Years Ago

Ha... "thought for reason"... I like that.
Thank you for the feedback and for reading Tom.
ah, this touches my soul, for i know these feelings well. I wrote a poem today along these lines, but slightly darker. I really like the subtle blend of science into your poetry, it gives it a unique edge and here, in this poem, i feel the stirrings of a resurrection coming on.

Posted 6 Years Ago


 David Scott

6 Years Ago

Thank you Joie.
Yes, this poem was a moment of tearful joy... Nothing dark here, only accepta.. read more
Joiedevivre

6 Years Ago

don't simplify your poems so that everyone can understand, i find intricacy makes for the best poetr.. read more
When we are undone , we tear up , feel like dirt , melt like snow in any heat , shiver in the coldest temps, drift away in any current , evaporate like salt but then to come back with the rain back to our origins...A splendid poem...:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


 David Scott

7 Years Ago

Thank you for your thoughts Sami. You do understand me here.
Sami Khalil

7 Years Ago

Wow. Good to know ...You are welcome...:)
I love the eloquence and wording of this poem. I read it twice, once in my mind, once upon my tongue...I enjoyed it, because I could relate to this piece at different moments in my life.

Posted 7 Years Ago


 David Scott

7 Years Ago

Thank you Heather. I have not read this one out load yet... I'll give it a try. ;)
Yes, in .. read more

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