The Moon Dreams of Being a Heart

The Moon Dreams of Being a Heart

A Poem by Sweet & Tender Hooligan
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When you're scared of the past and of the future and you don't feel a part of the present. Then where can you turn to?

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Bleeding hearts and weeping stars
The moon wishes to be permanently hidden,
 Always looking away and not knowing who to trust.
 Why is it that things always turn out this way?
Why is it that you can't trust anyone?
Nervous reflections,
Anxious shadows.
I never know which way to turn,
I never know who to turn too.
The moon dreams of being a heart because it wishes to be more than in space. 
Scared of what's ahead,
Scared of what's passed.
Heartless people dream of space because they are nothing but space.
Nervous reflections,
Anxious shadows.
Maybe I should hide away forever with the moon.

© 2011 Sweet & Tender Hooligan


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The longer lines break up the other ones, wich is obviously their intention, but I think it breaks the flow of the poem almost too much. It's almost like those three lines are telling a seperate story from the rest of the poem. Although, the two come together nicely with the last longer line. Overall I think this is a great little poem. Good work

There are no obvious technical errors, which is of course always a good thing, leaves my reviews less helpful though XD

Did you draw the picture too? Because if so, you have made my artistic side hurt :P

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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this feels... so in tune... of getting lost .... and a lingering sense of longing... in a refined way that appeals... makes me want it ... a great write overall...

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The longer lines break up the other ones, wich is obviously their intention, but I think it breaks the flow of the poem almost too much. It's almost like those three lines are telling a seperate story from the rest of the poem. Although, the two come together nicely with the last longer line. Overall I think this is a great little poem. Good work

There are no obvious technical errors, which is of course always a good thing, leaves my reviews less helpful though XD

Did you draw the picture too? Because if so, you have made my artistic side hurt :P

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Great poem! I love the idea.

Posted 9 Years Ago


I agree with Edwards. That very line, was so complex yet so simple and beautiful Amazing job.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is one of the most beautiful and delicate poems I've ever read and it call get sumed in this verse: "The moon dreams of being a heart because it wishes to be more than in space."
Amazing.

Posted 9 Years Ago


This poem was amazing. I like the closing line, 'Maybe I should hide away forever with the moon.' I also love how you connect the moon with a heart. Extremely creative. This poem was beautiful. I enjoyed reading each and every word.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like it it was good i like the part about heartless people are just space bcuz no heart no sould no mind no identifacation and deifference from any jane doe or john doe.
I loved it tho it was wonderful!

-abbie:)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i enjoyed every word of this poem...great use of the moon, i was pulled in right in the beginning. Bleeding hearts and weeping stars...magnificent words. If only everyone knew the value in the moon, the true magic.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Excellent job! Love the style and set up! The flow is great!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

great job, I love the metaphors you used. Sometimes we don't pay attention to the present because we're scared of the future and the past. nice job!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Sweet & Tender Hooligan
Sweet & Tender Hooligan

Newport, South Wales, United Kingdom



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