Paint Me

If you asked me what I want,

and I say there's nothing more;

don't believe me when I say

I know just what's in store.

I tried to stand too tall,

and I tried to do my best,

but all these painted words

I just could not express.

So paint me with your heart,

and paint me with your love.

Paint me ivory with things

I've been pushing long enough.

Paint me with your eyes,

and paint me with your smile.

I hate the contrast that I see,

ending all the while.

Black oil on my tongue,

but so pristine, looking in.

I hope you know to just stay out

because inside is a sin.

So you can paint me with your heart,

and you can paint me with your hate.

But wine, you find, is bittersweet,

and you'll just have to wait.

Paint me with your eyes,

just paint me till I'm gone.

Don't believe me when I say,

I swear nothing is wrong.

Reviews

[Tallulah]

Beautiful job. This is written so well. It has such great flow and the repetition of paint me with... Is just wonderful. I love this.
Black oil on my tongue,
but so pristine, looking in.
I hope you know to just stay out
because inside is a sin.
My favorite part.
Much love,
tallulah

[Jared]

Couldn't have said it better myself...the poem is rockin i loved it and i understood it. Good Job

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I wish that people would do the same...and see all my qualities and not just what I look like on the outside...but literally get me on the inside...so I really wish that they would see what I had inside. This was a good poem. Thanks for sharing. :)

[FlawedByDesign]

This is very nice :)

I've thought about doing a piece on the same theme for a while now and I may just get to it now that the thought has been refreshed in my head thanks to you.
The rhyme gives the poem the necessary flow and I like how to warn the painter and the ending stanza, especially the last line, is a great way to finish it; comes across as a call for help.

Nicely done.

[Angelheaded Hipster]

Theres some honesty to this write, and I think we've all been here..."What's wrong? What's on your mind?" And we are quick to answer with Nothing at all, Im fine, when really, our thoughts are racing everywhere else but on the problem that we see in our mind. Does that make sense?
The flow is really good, the word usage is great, I like that I can see you, on a canvas, being painted by someone who doesnt know you, but wants to, but you wont let this person fully in.

[Awdures]

Utterly lovely. "Don't believe me when I say nothing is wrong!" is one of the lines we should write in the great men's handbook to understanding women's speak. You create a wonderful crescendo leading us on a journey from the first stanza to the last.

All I can add to it is well done Kay, it's a beautiful poem.

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is beautiful. Using the words "Paint me with your eyes" made the poem strong and important. Each set of words making the poem more powerful and hopeful. True love bring out the best in the people lucky enough to know when you are in paradise. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Loner]

I agree with James .

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"So paint me with your heart,
and paint me with your love.
Paint me ivory with things
I've been pushing long enough."

{Paint me with this poem:-) {great flow--smooth read}

"Paint me with your eyes,
just paint me till I'm gone.
Don't believe me when I say,
I swear nothing is wrong."
{Awesome}

great theme/great metaphor/great poetry!!!

james:-)