Leave Me Under

Leave Me Under

A Poem by Cheavel DeLuna

just something that had to be said


And now I’ve fallen,

Into the ocean.

An ocean of writhing words,



I float here.

Not surfaced,

nor sinking.


But I know,

were it sink or swim,

I surely would have drowned by now.


Unless of course.

I’ve died already,

and simply do not know it yet.


But then again.

There’s still a chance,

I have not even fallen yet.

© 2010 Cheavel DeLuna

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If your words were edible, they'd be chocolate. A delicious, rich chocolate that you can't stop eating because you're too addicted to stop. Wonderful. :)

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I really enjoyed the feelings involved in this. Wonderful flow and structure as well. This is brillant and amazing!

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2 Reviews
Added on September 8, 2010
Last Updated on October 6, 2010
Tags: water, ocean, under, below, drown, breath, above, surface, fallen


Cheavel DeLuna
Cheavel DeLuna


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