Chemistry Betrays (Revised)

My chemistry betrays me as insanity pleads before lean-jaded depravity

seen scorn as a decrepit unraveling

of baffling mean-spirited entities gathering deceitfully

for more pandering of reality in a gallery slinging misery entirely...

My sympathy behaves erratically

seethes forlorn as heated apathy forms rapidly

soft-churning rhapsody squirms passionately...

Inevitably heart-warming tragedy occurs.

Fiendishly hard-earned philosophy

turns of metaphor laced individuality...

Blurred and slurred rhymes.

Aggressive lines wormed into the tapestry of sadism

this organisms mechanism of limelight fading posturism

burning eyes turning bright from realism

shading light from mine minds rind empty escapism

slime heavy kinda heady with the infectious algorithm...

 Swirls bleeding lecherous breathing escaping the rhythm of morbid reality

 curiosity yearns for instability

With the itty-bitty fallacy of a gallant killing spree

 gallons of rippling prayers stripped of buoyancy

 floating dead in the sea flamboyantly... 

Author's Note

Same poem (mostly)... But now edited... Yay...!

Reviews

[Robert Trakofler]

the velocity of your perspicacity of the duplicity of words specificity makes the bunny's brain nuerocity spark enthusiastically! LOL.... my god I have met my match!!!! You love words and they love you I know cause they just told me my dictionary just salivated all over my desk and started to groan in an unsightly manner causing me to have to clean up some unmentionable goo... be sure to put the dictionary farther away from the word porn next time. :)

[Chase Dylan]

Words are fun, flow structure is what this was intended for, aha... I f*****g died laughing when I saw your review, though...
Called my wife over, I was like...
Look at this moddafucker
im dying laughing...
DYING...
Number one review....
Ever...
You wanna know something else...
I do not use dictionaries or thesaurus or any help when writing...

All natural, or it aint happening...

I spell and meaning check on words i already put down, though...

EVERYONE tells me...

"dont write so your reader has to pick up a dict. every 5 secs"
But...

How am I supposed to KNOW what they all know or not...
I let the reader decide his/her intelligence

Cheers at such a pleasant comment...

"Match"...
Do not get carried away, eh, mate...?
Lololol

[barleygirl]

Once again, I really like this one a lot becuz it seems like the meaning of the message is more prominent than your rhyming, which is always good, but better when it doesn't distract from your message. I very much like the intensity of imagery here, which is contrasted by a seeming nonplussed attitude about it all. Great job. I haven't had a chance to check out your new rhyming website (thanks for the invite) but I was slammed by a pain flare for a week (fibromyalgia) & now I'm just starting to come alive again! *whew!* I'll get there sooner or later! *smile* (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Chase Dylan]

Appreciate the review, Barley, and do not worry... It is a very laid-back thing... No obligation or pressure... Just gonna pour my free-time into it and see how it goes... Hope you feel better...!

[.]

This reads to me like a kind of mental breakdown; where the chemical concoction that flows through the body and maintains sanity has been thrown into a headspin by the own insanity of one's reality. Does that make sense?

This is another multilayered write; many different possible meanings can be gleaned from this one. And as always the rap style format spins like a literary whirlwind. How you managed to edit this, i have no idea!
Unique as ever.

[Chase Dylan]

Since all "emotion" is just a chemical reaction... It makes perfect sense... One can only handle "perfect" instability for so long... Before the cracks give way to gaping fissures... Thank you for appreciating, Doodley... This was my first "successful" flow-landscape... Something I will continue to perfect until my grave...

It had no edit at first, but lots and lots and LOTS of reviews... Both negative and positive... Has helped me form a somewhat useful algorithm for what people enjoy in terms of style and presentation... I just follow that when editing... Makes for a much less complicated task than one might think...

[Jackie]

Must admit. I am quite jeleous of your vocabulary. Your choice of words and how flawlessly they sound when put together and read out. Supurb write and spot on silnete

[Chase Dylan]

99 percent of what is posted here took 15 minutes... This post took three days...! While i admit that I never use a thesaurus to write... It can be a pain to drudge up the PERFECT word from your head... Can take a minute... So... Do not be jealous, Jackie, and thank you very much... This was just hard work at making one of my first flow-landscapes... Anyone can do it... Just takes practice...!

[Jackie]

I appreciate the encouragement. Every now and than i do. And yes from top of the head can be a real struggle. Keep ot up man

[Chase Dylan]

Most welcome, mate, and you as well...

[Great Aunt Astri]

I am not surprised that 'insanity pleads'. The so called sanity in life often seems far more insane! Your wonderful poem is full of clever and evocative words. ( one word I did not understand 'shading light from my minds RIND?) The rhyme scheme is interesting, and the words move along beautifully, although with a slight feeling of 'blurred and slurred'. Was this deliberate? And although those rippling prayers stripped of bouyancy' were dead, there somehow seems to be some hope in that they were floating flamboyantly. Enjoyable read.

[Chase Dylan]

Rind being like, the leftover from a watermelon, so like a... Scooped-out brain, heh.... This is still one of my fav's... One of the only poems that I actually took time on... Thank you, Astri... Aye, I waned things to feel blurred and slurred... It is a favorite theme of mine... Who does not like a melting pot...!

[Great Aunt Astri]

Oh I like that, 'mind's rind!' A scooped out brain. I know the feeling well!

[Chase Dylan]

Aye... I scream for empty heads...! Heh

[Great Aunt Astri]

U wot ?????.......

[Chase Dylan]

Haha, it was an icecream reference... Prob not a good one...

[Great Aunt Astri]

Oh, I'm getting a bit slow in my old age! Haha ice cream... I scream. There is a literary term for that sort of things ... uh, brains dead, what is it again?

[Chase Dylan]

Brainfreeze? Haha...

[Great Aunt Astri]

SPOONERISM .. just remembered!

[Chase Dylan]

Lmao......

[Great Aunt Astri]

Ugh? ................?

[Chase Dylan]

I have no clue anymore... Brain-frozen spoons...?

[Hebe]

Very tragic and dark but true words spoken of existing human atrocities!! Great write!

[Soumya Deouskar]

Wow! How wonderfully you have stitched words in the poem. I could've never thought the way you look at things! What an eloquent and enjoyble piece. I'm very very impressed!
Keep writing!

[Chase Dylan]

Wow, why thank you, Soumya... I appreciate the impressive appreciation very much...

[Poetic Beauty]

A chaotic life that twist reality within the mind forming all kinds of catastrophic thoughts. Pinch in a little anger brewing and you get this mixed blender of emotions

[Chase Dylan]

You slammed the door shut on this one, Poetic... Hah, nice insight, a catastrophic review of blended fact... Thank you

[Poetic Beauty]

I'm glad I understood your poem.

[Chase Dylan]

You should be gladder than glad... Thanks again

[Relic]

Just hearing it sounds good even if I don't try to decipher the meaning, although I do recognize the tags. Keep writing my friend.

[Chase Dylan]

Thank you, Relic... Meaning is overrated... As is contextual perspective... Take what you will, and that seems to be all that is that... Thank you, and the tags are actually top tags for the site... I had no idea what to tag, so I went with that... Lol, you caught meh...

[Damien Ridge]

I love your use of vocabulary and rhyme schemes. "Aggressive lines wormed into the tapestry of sadism" I love your writing, it's very enjoyable. Thanks!

[Chase Dylan]

I love your appreciation! That was a fun line to write... Glad you enjoyed... Thanks, and you are welcome...

[MOON]

Lyrical poignant write with words that sing , I need a dictionary...

[Chase Dylan]

Thank you, Moon, it means a lot to hear