okay I wrote a song about twenty five years ago and reading this made me remember it its a bit sketchy in my sketchy bunny mind but.....
Woke up this morning,
got out of bed
evenings pleasure
drove in my head
don't know what I'm doing
maybe Ill find a job...
oh i can see now
I'll just pack my things and go
(refrain thing)
Life would be better
these things I'm sure I'll know
the Lowcale solution
okay you can go back to your regularly scheduled program :)
I say this partly of the intention of the write and partly because this reads like a song and like my song it sounds like a very happy tune but it is full of unhappy things in a sort of sardonic looney tunes melody
like my locale solution isn't one in dieting (change your lifestyle not your caloric intake!) and (change how you live not where you live and moving) to cure your ills neither is your write of blight and you scream it as such with a sublime beauty in that wonderful voice of yours. Oh yeah I love that you use mourning like me you are one sexy writer silent:) the the the the thats all the bunny has to say:)
Posted 4 Years Ago
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4 Years Ago
A nice ditty, my friend...
Thanks for it, aha
Morning
Mourning
...Who co.. read moreA nice ditty, my friend...
Thanks for it, aha
Morning
Mourning
...Who could resist...
Not our sexy-voiced selves
I am merely happy to be a vessel of which to ship the feelz...
All that follows is a pleasure to see
okay I wrote a song about twenty five years ago and reading this made me remember it its a bit sketchy in my sketchy bunny mind but.....
Woke up this morning,
got out of bed
evenings pleasure
drove in my head
don't know what I'm doing
maybe Ill find a job...
oh i can see now
I'll just pack my things and go
(refrain thing)
Life would be better
these things I'm sure I'll know
the Lowcale solution
okay you can go back to your regularly scheduled program :)
I say this partly of the intention of the write and partly because this reads like a song and like my song it sounds like a very happy tune but it is full of unhappy things in a sort of sardonic looney tunes melody
like my locale solution isn't one in dieting (change your lifestyle not your caloric intake!) and (change how you live not where you live and moving) to cure your ills neither is your write of blight and you scream it as such with a sublime beauty in that wonderful voice of yours. Oh yeah I love that you use mourning like me you are one sexy writer silent:) the the the the thats all the bunny has to say:)
Posted 4 Years Ago
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4 Years Ago
A nice ditty, my friend...
Thanks for it, aha
Morning
Mourning
...Who co.. read moreA nice ditty, my friend...
Thanks for it, aha
Morning
Mourning
...Who could resist...
Not our sexy-voiced selves
I am merely happy to be a vessel of which to ship the feelz...
All that follows is a pleasure to see
Separation, break ups with loved ones, be they others, or parts of ourselves, by death or design, are eternal, or so they seem. And I thank you for giving words to the impossible emotion :-). added to my favorites.
Posted 4 Years Ago
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4 Years Ago
Another sweet comment, Mary, thank you so much...!
Glad you enjoyed it, and never impossible<.. read moreAnother sweet comment, Mary, thank you so much...!
Glad you enjoyed it, and never impossible
Just farther away, sometimes
When you are mourning a break up it does seem like forever. So does December with its cold and grey (at least where I come from). Poignant piece, but we survive and eventually move on. Nicely conveyed lines and expression.
Actually re-writing this one for a national song contest i HOPE to place well in...
Thanks s.. read moreActually re-writing this one for a national song contest i HOPE to place well in...
Thanks so much, Chris, for your poignant words...
Turtle and move, turtle and move....
"I stare behind me and see her one last time in the rust of spaces left between us."
Extraordinary line one could get lost in. This is my first of your's, and feel moved to read more.
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Oh, well thank you, Kelly... That means a lot coming from a writer such as yourself... I liked that .. read moreOh, well thank you, Kelly... That means a lot coming from a writer such as yourself... I liked that line as well...
There was a sad longing written here...but then again the will of a survivor coming through. That seems to be a pervading theme in your work, that you are a survivor. Here's to making it through all the tough times to better days ahead. I enjoyed the read.
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
A keen eye, friend... Have certainly had some tough times... But what are tough times but hotter fir.. read moreA keen eye, friend... Have certainly had some tough times... But what are tough times but hotter fire to burn more impurities away... Thank you so much for the insight here