Sarcastic Oblivion
A Poem by Chase Dylan
 Caustic reptilian... 
Sarcastic oblivion is a caustic reptilian Is a cause for a million trillion billion villains to shed their skin chillingly... Willingly still A fed lamb on ah-grill... Still as dams filled A still of damnable swill... A pill and refill the drill that will build flammable hills With will of steel... Tamable fields steal gullible frame from the heels of seals Healed like veal in halls of fame... Flames and rain Eels in pain... Lame-brained canes and a deal with Cain to cradle Abel Disabled enabled to go down in fables heard round the stables... Tables round and able to saddle cables Ladles making halos... A noble payload
© 2017 Chase Dylan
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The words, the ambiance, the rhythm... I liked everything.
It seemed to me (at least in my mind as I read it) that the tone changed right before reading "Flames and rain", as if day turned into night and a strange deep and calm voice whispered the rest of the poem in my ears.
I loved it!
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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6 Years Ago
You would be pretty correct in that tone change, Tom, and thank you so much for appreciating and tim.. read moreYou would be pretty correct in that tone change, Tom, and thank you so much for appreciating and time taken to visit... It means the world
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6 Years Ago
It was definitely worth it so you're most certainly welcome. I'm looking forward to read more of you.. read moreIt was definitely worth it so you're most certainly welcome. I'm looking forward to read more of your writing in the future.
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6 Years Ago
Aye, ditto, friend... Thanks you again, a pleasure
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5 Years Ago
Gee wilickers boys and girls… I wonder why this vacuous SJW d********g ran away with his tail betw.. read moreGee wilickers boys and girls… I wonder why this vacuous SJW d********g ran away with his tail between his legs? I wonder why that "social writing site" turned out to be a fake effort abandoned almost immediately by it's own creator?
Eggregious hypocritical virtue signaling bully games never work out in the long run. I'm glad you realized how embarrassing your actions were/are. Maybe if you had some substance behind your populist rage you'd be worth something... but alas... you turned out to truly be intellectually vacuous.
And I'm not even going to get into the plagiarism accusations against you. (which is probably the real reason you ran away like the coward you truly are.)
If you play stupid games, you win stupid prizes. Enjoy your shame. I hope you learned something.
Regards,
-- you know who this is... I never blocked you, ya coward. Despite all of your bullshit... you are still welcome to say whatever you want to me publicly or privately. And if you had any balls, personal integrity or honor you wouldn't have had to scurry away like you did. We could of talked like men and I would have been more than happy to debate you. You chose to act like an SJW bully. You did this to yourself...
(also, stop plagiarizing other peoples work... if your that intellectually bankrupt you have to resort to that s**t... maybe writing just isn't for you)
I look forward to your further cowardly silence.
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wonderfully written....words in this fit so well...keep it up.
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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6 Years Ago
A wonderful review, I appreciate the time and encouragement given... Thank you, Wajiha
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6 Years Ago
always a pleasure......
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I'll never look at oblivion the same way now lol...I think the title is very creative ;) :) As always your wordplay fascinates me, Silente!
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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6 Years Ago
Thank you, Yumna...! I am glad to help change how someone looks at something, lol... Yeah, I liked i.. read moreThank you, Yumna...! I am glad to help change how someone looks at something, lol... Yeah, I liked it as well... Titles are never my friend...
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6 Years Ago
haha I think titles are the trickiest part or at least for me ;P You're welcome :)
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6 Years Ago
I thought you did the same as me... Just pick a nice looking phrase from the writing and pray people.. read moreI thought you did the same as me... Just pick a nice looking phrase from the writing and pray people accept it, lol
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6 Years Ago
yeah provided that I do come up with a write lol I've been too dry these days :~ Btw Idrc about peop.. read moreyeah provided that I do come up with a write lol I've been too dry these days :~ Btw Idrc about people accepting or not ;) too arrogant haha ;p
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6 Years Ago
Oh yeah, I forgot... You are certainly your own person, lol...
All I write are darn lyrics th.. read moreOh yeah, I forgot... You are certainly your own person, lol...
All I write are darn lyrics that flop... I wrote this poem in like 5 minutes...All in the name of making myself feel better about the fact my musical skill is practically zero... It did not help my ego much, but at least it made me laugh...
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6 Years Ago
well I sure want to come with lyrics too but apparently not lol there were times when I did use to w.. read morewell I sure want to come with lyrics too but apparently not lol there were times when I did use to write in 5 mins but even that seems like a dream now haha
And I think you have the right attitude ;) write for yourself and if it makes you satisfied or laugh then job done ;) :)
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6 Years Ago
... You literally wrote bar for bar to match our collab'... Seamlessly and instantly, I might add..... read more... You literally wrote bar for bar to match our collab'... Seamlessly and instantly, I might add... It was a bit ago, but I seriously doubt your ability to actually do it, has diminished at all... Just the spark... Sparks and muses come and go all the time... I certainly have the wrong attitude plenty... Best to chase laughter and self-joy, you are right...!
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6 Years Ago
Oh that, well it was a while back and I used to be carefree back then lol opd is wearing me down the.. read moreOh that, well it was a while back and I used to be carefree back then lol opd is wearing me down these days and the little creativity I had is wavering away haha
You can chase it if you see it otherwise it's like grabbing smoke ;P
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6 Years Ago
Haha, it was like... A month or two ago...? Come-onnnnn.... You can not have had your spirit broken .. read moreHaha, it was like... A month or two ago...? Come-onnnnn.... You can not have had your spirit broken by some out-patients in a months time... You are too arrogant for that...! Do not take work so seriously... At the end of the day the only person who joins you in the grave... Is you... Hah, so best make sure you enjoy your own company....
But you can not grab smo.... Oh... I see what you did there...
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6 Years Ago
Ah yeah I know but I am a kid after all just thrown out in the real world lol so it'll take time ;p<.. read moreAh yeah I know but I am a kid after all just thrown out in the real world lol so it'll take time ;p
haha grave, uhm yeah didn't think that either..
Cool that I can fool ya, huh? lmao ;p
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6 Years Ago
Pffft, my parents kicked me out the DAY I was 18... Haha, and lots of times before that, but not off.. read morePffft, my parents kicked me out the DAY I was 18... Haha, and lots of times before that, but not officially, legally... Haha...
It absolutely takes time, you are right...
Ups and down are inevitable...
Fool me, though...
Psh, never...
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6 Years Ago
Uhm well kids stay with their parents in the East so I'm stayin' a kid haha that is until I decide t.. read moreUhm well kids stay with their parents in the East so I'm stayin' a kid haha that is until I decide to marry lool
I did once, I can do it again ;) lol jk ;p
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6 Years Ago
Yeah... I just wanted to talk big talk... Lol
Do they really...? Hmm, lucky...
.. read moreYeah... I just wanted to talk big talk... Lol
Do they really...? Hmm, lucky...
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6 Years Ago
haha and I was under the impression that you always talk big ;p
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6 Years Ago
Rofl... I was under the impression I silently formulated thoughts and tapped them out on a mechanica.. read moreRofl... I was under the impression I silently formulated thoughts and tapped them out on a mechanical keyboard... Hugely, though, I type with hugeness of movement... So as to feel as important as possible...
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6 Years Ago
hugeness of movement? as in wrecking places all over? haha ;p
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6 Years Ago
... Maybe... Lmao
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that is quite the pan full potpourri .. a very serious theme and feel to it but fun on the tongue :) your closing two lines inspire me to be the cook with the ladle in hand ... gently stirring, stirring around and around ..a dark brew that i can not see the contents ... not sure i really want to .. so many animals ... :{
E.
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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6 Years Ago
Thanks.... You seemed to grasp the feel for this one quite well... I wanted to be funny and light, b.. read moreThanks.... You seemed to grasp the feel for this one quite well... I wanted to be funny and light, but with overtones of serious darkness... Halos of animal parts... Haha... Thanks again
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6 Years Ago
:) .................
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This one is great! I always love to read your writings! They are unique!
Well Written, Silente!
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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6 Years Ago
Glad you liked it, Shasha... Thanks
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6 Years Ago
Not a problem!
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I feel as if you should've been born during the shakespearian times. Your writing is very fruitful and colorful and the terminology is immensely complicated. You are like the shakespeare of today!
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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6 Years Ago
Hah, well then... I can not say this review did not bring a smile to my face.... Shakespeare of our .. read moreHah, well then... I can not say this review did not bring a smile to my face.... Shakespeare of our time, eh...? I do not know about that, but the comparison is certainly flattering... Thanks very much
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Another great one, I love the flow of your poems, the way it sounds when I read it aloud is amazing and really catchy. Well done.
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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6 Years Ago
Thanks, Lykos, always good to appreciate spoken word flow
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This flows from the tongue with majesty sir, much enjoyed!
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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6 Years Ago
That is what one hopes to hear, Mr. E.... Thanks muchly
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It's beautiful hahaha!!!!
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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6 Years Ago
Hahaha... A beautiful review.... Thank you, QTZ...
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Your poems are a sure sure delight Silente:)
Thanks for sharing this!!
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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6 Years Ago
As your words are a sure, sure delight, Neetha... Thanks so much for the visit
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6 Years Ago
My pleasure:)
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"Lame-brained canes and a deal with Cain to cradle Abel" - this made my jaw drop. Your word play as astounding. Your piece, a flavorful mouthful with infinite meaning.
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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6 Years Ago
Thank you, Kaliope... Your words mean the world
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Added on June 30, 2017
Last Updated on June 30, 2017
Tags: Poetry, dark, life, sad, adventure, death, depression, family, fantasy, fiction, hope, horror, love, magic, mystery, pain, poem, romance, story
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Chase DylanDenver, CO
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