Sacred Vapors

Sacred Vapors

A Poem by Chase Dylan
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Submarine-stage...

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I'm untamed
Insane brain lame-reined in to fillet saber-lain drains
In labor I gain ravens braver than slavers able to savor gall-breaker takers
if you're in favor lets rape-her and traverse papers for diverse capers
I'm tapered
a subversive undertaker of faker law-makers
on sacred vapors I'm a shaker of all traitors
Belays raided faded duration sated gated by lesions on nations
Fulmination of generations slated in gray
Painted on a submarine stage
a rage in a cage set like a face-plant
I'm like Abraham and freed the slaves of verbal-trends
I'm global-sent and vorpal-bent
but low-rent keeps me lent to the lamb
I'm slammed and lambasted
ran outta RAM by a ram slipperier than grand
By ghosts boasted most toast by the roastiest roach
I puff a roach 
roast a goat
loads of moats rowed alone
Host is over-grown
sober toned loans and blown-out foam
roam ah-doam and sloped groans
I'm holier than the boast of those ghost hosts
No tone

© 2017 Chase Dylan


Author's Note

Chase Dylan
Umm... Stuff...

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You're back in the groove, my friend! My favourite lines in this one are:
"a subversive undertaker of faker law-makers
on sacred vapors I'm a shaker of all traitors
Belays raided faded duration sated gated by lesions on nations
Fulmination of generations slated in gray
Painted on a submarine stage".
Keep 'em coming!


Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Thank you, Horseman, it is much appreciated
The Iron Horseman

6 Years Ago

You're welcome, Silente.



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Shifting gears at times
often like a rap song of rhyme...
dark and violent with no control
in the thinking as in confusion brought on by an unknown substance mingling with others in one's system.
Nice structure.


Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Thank you, Josie, def' lots of gears changed when I edited this from its original rap form...
Well, I suppose there is a place for everyone.... you too! But apart from the meaning, the poem reads really lyrically with the assonance and alliteration and made up words. You are very clever at that!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

I thank you, Astri, and humbly agree... We all have a place...
"I puff a roach 
roast a goat
loads of moats rowed alone
Host is over-grown
sober toned loans and blown-out foam
roam ah-doam and sloped groans
I'm holier than the boast of those ghost hosts
No tone"

You can start rapping now hahahha. I think This will be a good rap track!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

I am def' rapping now, haha, and it is going quite well... Thank you, Cecelia
Cecelia A. Green

6 Years Ago

welcome hahaha!!!
your 'umm...stuff...' is umm
FRICKING GREAT !!
half way through reading this my mind goes zoooooooooommmmmm and then back. a nice adventure through the fabulous words and imagery and concepts. loved it !!! always making me proud of your work. keep it up

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Thank you, Pie-face! Great to hear from you again, glad you liked this one as well... I am proud you.. read more
pia

6 Years Ago

The excitement cannot be contained.
pia

6 Years Ago

Double HAAAHH
Always with a way of words. Sorry it's been awhile, but thanks for allowing me to read it:)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Pffft, I do not care how long it has been... Life is a busy-bee, and we the honey.... That sounded n.. read more
roast a goat
like goat?
greatest of all time?
made me smile
thanks

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Most welcome, and thank you for taking the time to tell me of your smile, it makes me smile... Start.. read more
I like your note "Umm... Stuff..." hahaha.
But that stuff flows wonderfully and is a pleasure for the mind to read.
Thanks for sharing.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

I do not ever do the author notes... So I decided to do something special for this one... When I tri.. read more
Your rhymes created such a perfect rhythm at each sentence, your depth and creativity are simply amazing.

Thank you for sharing.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

My pleasure, thank you for reading, Joey the master happy-smith...!
Joey Nizz

6 Years Ago

lol your welcome man.
Wow this is very deep and meaningful. A mix of many a thing, layered out so perfectly. Alas, as I have stated before, you have a way with words, that I deem as a gift. I applaud you once more, my friend, for such deep thoughts. Thank you and continue doing a great job.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Thank you muchly, Maria, is it appreciated
Maria

6 Years Ago

Sure thing my friend, I truly enjoy reading your artistic poems and writings.
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One line in this poem sums up your style, Silente.....

"I'm like Abraham and freed the slaves of verbal trends."

This reads to me like an anarchist vent; stuck in society full of anxiety, sick to the gills from the yes-man pills, wanting to breaking, to lead the forsaken, yet chained to the grind with the rest of mankind.

Exceptional use of language with an undertone of rage and revolution. Very nicely done.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Thank you very much, Doodley, coming from someone with such a masterful grasp of classic language, a.. read more

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Added on August 5, 2017
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Denver, CO



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