Neptitus

I love the ocean. It's a great enigma, And so I felt i'd make a personality that would fit

In the dark confines of the ocean floor
In the murky depths, that your dreams will ignore..
Lies a ruler so great and corrupted with darkness
Some say that he's dead, others whisper "he's heartless"

With a strike of his triton he can shift the earth's core
And surface the beings only hell could endure
He could part the great seas with a ghoulish shriek
He possesses the strong and empowers the weak

His name is Neptitus, a force to be left alone.
Who could sink a great ship with a quivering moan
A marvel shape shifter in the great unknown
He with no allies who travels alone

The coral of the reefs all turn to grey
When they get the word, that he's on his way
The warm water turns cold, at the beat of a heart
And it gets even colder when the day turns to dark

Because he lurks harder when the sun is away
Now that the moons up, it's his time to play
And he'll have his fun when the sharks come to see him
Cause, he'll gut them, and stuff them, for his cavern museum

On thunderstorm nights he rocks the whole ocean
Without moving a finger, just a suttle head motion 
The tales that you hear have all been proven true
He lurks in the shadows, and we haven't a clue

All of the sea beasts quiver in fear
Because when he's around nobody comes near
He is silent and evil, and likes to play games
And the hearts of the sea life remains un detained

His beard goes for miles, and his hair goes for days
His eyes light the ocean, and stir up the waves
His tail contains hooks, and netting, and scars
He tells a story that will reach to the stars..

In the dark confines of the ocean floor...

Reviews

[John Phoenix Hutchinson..]

Congratulations this poem has been "approved" for publication in...

THE MAGICAL MYTHICAL MYSTERY COMPENDIUM.
-Metaphysical, Mystical & Fantastical Poetry of the Arcane

By John Phoenix Hutchinson and Others. (c) 2012

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[Anissa Amer]

Cool thanks!

[Forest Green]

Excellent imagery and metaphorically perfect..

This is great..!

[Anissa Amer]

Thank you

[James William Dyer]

I liked your subject matter, the positioning of words into concise stanzas, and your ability to portray this old god in a story-like fashion. My one complaint would be that I wanted to hear more about this god's motives, for you to have imbued him with more dimensionality in terms of character. This god, and his underwater habitat, would be an excellent metaphor for someone with insecurities lurking down on the ocean floors, thrashing around....whatever you wanted, but I wanted to know more of his insides. I enjoyed reading this poem, it had very nice imagery.

[Anissa Amer]

Thank you for the feedback. I know I could have put more into it, but it's the picture I wanted the reader to paint for themselves.

[James William Dyer]

I liked it.

[Anissa Amer]

Thank you :)

[CreativeCookie]

Love it. Gets you thinking and wondering and dreaming up a sea king of your own. The way you worded it you painted a picture, but left room for the reader to add a few brush strokes of their own.
Love,
CreativeCookie

[Anissa Amer]

Thank you, so much . Glad you enjoyd it